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Ah, l'amour
by Laurie Walker
09/22/07
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#1
The blonde curls and petite form of Lucy May Olsen had been turning the heads of every man and woman in Blowing Rock since her first appearance in the delivery room, nineteen years ago.

Imagine everyone’s surprise when, for the first time anyone could recollect, someone caught her eye instead.
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#2
Jackson took one last longing look at his wife frantically punching the computer keys as yet another story took her mind captive.
There was no doubt Gracie loved him most in this world.
Unfortunately it didn’t do much to allay the sting every time her other passion shoved him aside.
(50)

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#3
His finger slowly traced the curve of her jaw, sending shivers rippling through her body. The warm touch of his lips made her mind reel. Never had anyone so completely captured her heart, body, and soul. Never had she felt so treasured as he breathed the words, “I love you.”
(50)

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#4
The two of them gazed into bright blue eyes, astounded to have been a part of creating something so remarkable. The baby yawned, her mouth stretching to boundaries previously uncharted. Her tiny fist grabbed Mother’s hand as easily as the movement secured their hearts.
(44)

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#5
Stacey placed a gentle hand upon the cover of her well-worn Bible, allowing the moment to wash her troubled soul clean. Countless moments in her life had she experienced love.
Only when she came to know her Lord did Stacey recognize how true love, unconditional love, genuinley felt.
(48)


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Jennifer Pellegrino 15 Jan 2010
Number four is my favorite! It's so precious and just lovely! :)
lauren finchum 06 Oct 2007
#3 is my idea of amour (giggle). Nice work.
Tammy Johnson 26 Sep 2007
Great job! I liked #4 with the baby's yawn reaching "territories yet untouched" or something like that. Had to chuckle.
Teri Wilson 26 Sep 2007
You need to write a romance novel! In a big way! Love and blessings, Teri
darlene hight 26 Sep 2007
Excellent snapshots of life! Well done! Darlene
Rachel Burkum 26 Sep 2007
Mmmm - I really liked these! Great writing with such wonderful descriptions and emotions in so few words.
Emily Blakely 25 Sep 2007
Pretty hard to pick a favorite here. Each one captures precious emotions.
Janice Cartwright 25 Sep 2007
All are really good but #4 has something special as well as #5.
Allison Egley  25 Sep 2007
These are really good. I'm afraid my future husband may be able to relate to number 2. 3 and 5 were really good too.
dub W 24 Sep 2007
Number 3 is so sensual, you should be writng Christian Romance novels.
Linda Roth 24 Sep 2007
Laurie, they are all good! The second one made me laugh.
Mo 24 Sep 2007
These are ALL just great, so descriptive!
Verna Cole Mitchell  23 Sep 2007
Great love snapshots--every one.
Linda Germain  23 Sep 2007
I guess we can all relate to #2 as being a LOVE in our lives. Well done... and very descriptive!
Betty Castleberry 23 Sep 2007
I'm a sucker for a good love story, and there are *five* here. Very well done.
Jan Ackerson  22 Sep 2007
Just excellent, every one--and I, too, thought #2 was the best. Ouch.
Sharon Henderson 22 Sep 2007
Great way to carry the theme through them all. #2 hits home but #1 is my favorite!
Kristen Hester 22 Sep 2007
Oh my, oh my. These are great. Number 2 was very convicting...and my husband's real name is Jackson. Wow.
Joanne Sher  22 Sep 2007
Oooohhh - these are GOOD! Love the last two especially. Amazing pictures out of so few words!
Pat Guy  22 Sep 2007
Mmmmm ... No.2 all the way!!! You packed a lotta love on so few words. Great stuff!




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