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Finally Benjamin
by Violet Nesdoly
08/04/03
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FINALLY BENJAMIN

I feel niggles of cramps, sitting in the green recliner, tired after shopping & think, could this be it? No, it’s two weeks early. But all night those keep-on-coming-back clenchings & command my body, BEHAVE, like you hold your breath to get rid of hiccups & ignore them, go to church anyway & to the Pantry but I’m not hungry & can’t wait for home to collapse on couch exhausted from fighting & this can’t be it, can it? & watch the second hand on kitchen clock – five minutes – what
should I do? & call Mel and Jan & sit on the floor while Sonia plays plasticine & another one possesses my body...Hurry Ernie!
Four minutes! & Ernie at last & at Jan and Mel’s a trickle & gush!
Borrow beach towel & drift in and out & parking lot lights &
breathe, blow, breathe, blow & step, breathe, step, blow
& breathe, blow & oh! oh! & breathe, blow &
face in mine “Slow down. Look at me”
& oh! oh! let go &
doctor’s here
& slip
Waa!
It’s a boy!
& it’s over – that’s all there is?
& he’s warm, lively, skin to skin & they put a stocking toque on him
& we laugh, then they roll him away & the nine months is over & I can’t stop smiling
& my body’s mine again & I can’t stop smiling & finally Benjamin & I can’t stop smiling.

Copyright © 2003 by Violet Nesdoly


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Jay Cookingham 20 Aug 2003
Great job Violet! Although I have no idea what "niggles" are! - Jay Cookingham
Peggy Matthews-Rose 10 Aug 2003
Really like this way of telling a precious birth story. Fresh and innovative -- and a wonderful memory for Benjamin one day!
Steven Wickstrom 08 Aug 2003
Very cleverly written. Great job!
Peter D. Mallett 07 Aug 2003
It was interesting the way you chose to link this all together with the and's, as all the events really blurred into one bigger event. Well done.
Debra L. M cKeen Sparks 05 Aug 2003
Fabulous -- absolutely fabulous. Loved it -- loved it's presentation -- Fabulous!!! Debbie
Jenny Smith 05 Aug 2003
Very different! Made me remember all 3 girls! I also like how you got on the page.
Donna J. Shepherd 04 Aug 2003
How precious. Brought back memories of my son's birth. Thanks for posting this! - Donna J.
Donna Haug 04 Aug 2003
Nell that was so unique and precious. Very original. love the way you placed it on the page. neat. God bless! Donna
Mary Elder-Criss 04 Aug 2003
Wonderfully written and posted! Sure brought back some memories of my own. Thanks for sharing, & God bless. ~Mary
Deborah Porter  04 Aug 2003
Violet, I loved this. The sense of momentum was wonderful! Excellent! With love, Deb
angela mcclinton 04 Aug 2003
Unusual and eye-catching presentation on the page! Hey, I wish my son had been born THAT quick!! What a precious memory you have shared and a gift from God. God Bless, Angie




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