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I'll Take It
by David Story
12/07/06
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I'll Take It - Parts I & II

Thought I'd combine both parts of a Writing Challenge that I recently wrote:

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Part One: The Topic was Parent...

Itís a job Iíll like? One Iíll enjoy?

Sometimes.

Sometimes?

Sometimes.

But I wonít ever hate it.

Youíll hate it, from time to time.

How about the pay? Is it good?

No pay.

No pay?

Correct.

The hours?

Long. The hours are very long.

Weekends?

Weekends.

Holidays?

Holidays too.

No days off?

Not really, no.

Not even a break from time to time?

No breaks.

None?

None.

But it is enjoyable. I mean; itís not like itíll cause me any pain? Will it?

It might. NoÖit most definitely will.

Cause pain?

Like you have never known.

But itís still a job Iíll like? A job Iíll enjoy?

Yes.

Benefits. How about benefits?

More than you can possibly imagine.

Really?

Really.

And fulfillment?

Beyond your wildest dreams.

Letís see if I understand. Thereís no time off, no pay, and itíll cause pain. Iíll like it sometimes, and Iíll hate it others. But the benefits and the fulfillment are beyond anything I can possibly imagine?

And thereís the love.

The love?

You may not always like it, or enjoy itÖbut you will always love it.

Okay then, Iíll take it.

Here's Part II: The Topic was Volunteer...

Are you sure?

I am.

I want you to think about it before you choose. I want you to be sure.

I am sure, for it is your will for me.

And I am pleased that you would volunteer for such aÖmission, simply because I will it.

I would. And I do.

Then understand that, it is about much more than what we have already discussed.

I understand.

Do you?

I understand I am to become one of them; to walk with them and talk with them.

Yes, this is all true. But there is more still.

You spoke of the pain.

Yes.

Is this what you refer to now?

In some ways, yes.

But you also spoke of the love.

The love you have for them. But do not be so quick to assume that they will share this love. Do not assume that they will feel the same about you.

I understand. And yet, I feel that there is more you are trying to tell me.

There is.

What is it, Father?

There will come a time, a moment, when I will no longer love you.

This time, this moment you speak ofÖit is necessary?

It is.

And when this time is over, you will look on me with your love once again?

I will.

And when it is finished, you will be able to look at them once againÖwith this same love?

I will.

And they will be reconciled unto you? They will be forgiven? They will be free?

Yes.

My answer remains the same.

Then I will ask once more only. Son, this task that has been placed before you Ė are you willing? Are you willing to live with them? Are you willing to die for them?

I am.

Then let it be soÖ

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ďAnd this is how you will recognize him: You will find a baby lying in a manger, wrapped snugly in strips of cloth!Ē - Luke 2:12 (NLT)

If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be! TRUST JESUS NOW

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David Story 11 Dec 2006
Comment: Just a quick note on why I used the word love, when referring to the moment Jesus cried out "My God, my God, why have you forsaken me?" (Mark 15:34). I wanted to use love because I had already used it in the previous challenge. And while I believe that God the Father never stopped loving God the Son, I felt that I the word conveyed (to some degree at least), what Jesus may have felt at the time the sins of the world were placed squarely on His shoulders. It was never my intention to offend anyone, and I pray I have not done so.
Don Beers 08 Dec 2006
Great idea, you had me reading right along enjoying the concept, until I read this "There will come a time, a moment, when I will no longer love you." Everything else in the story is intriguing but then....




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