I definitely agree with Todd on that point; the "I'm a cops wife" almost became the chorus in a rap song...(do rap songs have choruses?)
The tempo was violated, no matter how well intentioned the line was, as a writer it took away from what you wanted to say. Or, perhaps, since this is the essence of the poem, "I'm a cops wife" could be brought out in other ways.
My man's out on the streets in darkness.
I'm fearful for his life.
I'm scared a crime will take him;
Though, I'm proud to be his wife.
Was this haiku/rap poetry? :o)
This was a very interesting article which really conveyed the fear and pride that goes hand in hand with being "a cop's wife". I think that the poem would be even more powerful if you only used the "I'm a cop's wife" as a one line header and then as the last line of the poem. I found myself wanting to jump over the "I'm a cop's wife" line because it seemed to interrupt the flow of a very good poem. Thank you for writing this and may God bless your husband and family!
