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Not my Dream House
by Donna Emery
09/16/06
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This isn't my dream house.

I've always prided myself on being able to adapt to my Girl's whims, but this is too much to ask of me. After all, Iím a glamour girl. With all of my fancy clothes, it should be obvious that Iím destined for better things.

Oh, it's nice enough. Iím sitting on a bed of pine needles, and their spicy scent surrounds me. I'm seated against a strong tree trunk, and I think back to how I got here.

This morning my Girl dressed me in the blue gown, and we danced around the tent. I was glad my Girl had brought me on this camping trip, but I didnít like this place. Inside the tent were long, ominous shadows. After our dance, she brought me out in back of the tent. I watched as she fashioned a miniature village: a cabin from stacked twigs, a lake from some aluminum foil, and pebbles for a path to the lake. She tore some small branches, and stuck them in the ground. If you were my size, this little village would be just right for you.

A little while ago, the Girl told me she was going swimming, and Iíve been here since then. Itís just not my sort of place. After all, I have a destiny. Iím a Ballroom Barbie, and I donít see any ballroom in these woods.

The silence is ominous. Thereís a chill in the air. I donít know why the Girl didnít put on my stole, and my shoulders are covered with gooseflesh. And itís not just the cold. Out of the corner of my eye, I can see one of the Boyís toys. He was flung carelessly on the nearby ground by the Boy. Heís dressed in an outfit of khaki and brown. He looks at me with a menacing stare. I know his intentions canít be good.

I wish my Girl would come back from swimming. Anything is preferable to this primitive abandonment. Iím meant to swirl to her childish melodies. I certainly wasnít meant to be secluded here with the steely eyes of this GI Joe.

To make matters worse, the Boy came out of the tent. He sneered at the Girlís little village, but he also saw GI Joe. He picked him up and pushed open his Kung Fu grip. This seemed to satisfy Boy, because he flung him down again Ė right by my side, and ran off in the direction of the swimming pool.

So now heís next to me. This does not bode well for my fate. His eyes speak his purpose, and it is not honorable. Now that heís able to approach me, and his hand can grasp me, I fear that my dancing days will soon be at an end. Farewell, my girl! I can see that heís gaining on me! If only Iíd stayed in my dream house, this never would have happened.

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Story # 2

This isn't my dream house.

I've always enjoyed being able to adapt to my Girl's whims, and this is no exception. After all, I may have started out as a glamour girl, but Iím willing to try new things. Despite my fancy clothes, I think it is wonderful to be in such a different setting.

It's so nice here. Iím sitting on a bed of pine needles, and their spicy scent surrounds me. I'm seated against a strong tree trunk, and I think back to how I got here.

This morning my Girl dressed me in the blue fluffy gown, and began dancing me around the tent. I was glad my Girl had brought me on this camping trip. This place fascinates me. Inside the tent were cool, restful shadows. After our dance, she brought me out in back of the tent. I watched as she fashioned a miniature village: a cabin from stacked twigs, a lake from some aluminum foil, and pebbles for a path to the lake. She tore some small branches, and stuck them in the ground. If you were my size, this little village would be just right for you.

A little while ago, the Girl told me that she was going swimming, and Iíve been here since then. This is not what Iím used to, and Iím enjoying this adventure. I may be a Ballroom Barbie, but I donít see any ballroom in these woods.

The serenity here is soothing. Thereís a cooling breeze on my shoulders, and Iím glad that the Girl didnít put on my stole. And itís not just the view that is enjoyable. Out of the corner of my eye, I can see one of the Boyís toys. He was flung carelessly on the nearby ground by the Boy. Heís dressed in an outfit of khaki and brown. He looks at me with an enticing smile. If only he could approach me, Iím sure we could share a pleasant interlude.

Before I saw him, I wished my Girl would come back from swimming. But now I prefer my little village. Iíve only known how to swirl to her childish melodies. I never dreamed how wonderful it might be to be secluded here with the soulful eyes of this GI Joe.

To help things along, the Boy came out of the tent. He sneered at the Girlís little village, but he also saw GI Joe. He picked him up and pushed open his Kung Fu grip. This seemed to satisfy Boy, because he threw him down again Ė right by my side, and ran off in the direction of the swimming pool.

So now heís next to me. This is such a wonderful turn of events! His eyes speak to my heart, and I can tell that he has much to share with me. Now that heís able to approach me, I think that my dancing days will pale in comparison. Take your time, my Girl! I can see that heís reaching his hand out to me! And to think this never would have happened, if Iíd stayed in my dream house.




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Joanne Sher  27 Sep 2007
TOTALLY fun and creative. What an imagination you have!
Leigh MacKelvey 25 Sep 2007
Donna, This was GREAT! I'm so glad I read it. How did you think sooo creatively?! Loved it, great work! Love, Leigh
Betty Castleberry 25 Sep 2007
Very creative, and a fun read, too. Barbie? Who would've thunk it? Congratulations on getting the showcase.
Janice Cartwright 24 Sep 2007
What a creative way to illustrate a deeper truth! I've known both kinds of people but as for me I would rather be the second Barbie. Not always able to but I'm trying.
Jan Ackerson  29 Aug 2007
Donna, I love this! I'm going to feature it in the Front Page Showcase for the week of September 24. Look for it on FW home page!
lydia kasumba 13 Nov 2006
Sho, it was confusing to understand who was telling and who the 'girl' was. And then, just when i thought i'd figured it out, something didn't make sense and then i just read the other reviewsand it clicked at that point. It IS well written and SUPER creative. in FACT the most creative thing i've read so far on FW. Barbie! i never would have guessed.
Glorey Wooldridge 15 Oct 2006
Liked it! Another reminder - is the cup 1/2 empty or 1/2 full? We get to choose.....
Brenda Kern  28 Sep 2006
Very creative, and it drew me in, wondering who the narrator was, etc.
Amy Michelle Wiley  18 Sep 2006
Hehe, cute stories! Very creative.
Debbie Sickler 16 Sep 2006
LOL! This was so creative. I thought it was going to be about a dog at first and was wondering why it would be left behind while the Girl swam. Didn't even occur to me that I was reading the thoughts of a Barbie! And I love the two takes on the sinister/hunky G.I. Joe. hehe Great entry! Hope you get lots of competition though. :)




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