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The Secret In the Ju Jube Tree
by Betty Castleberry
08/27/06
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Out in the woods
In the Ju Jube tree
Live wee little folk
Who are happy and free

Come morning they rise
And sip dewberry brew
They eat Frangi flowers
And a biscuit or two

Then they go off to work
To make puffles and biddles
And during their break
They make music on fiddles

When lunch time is near
They all gather together
Bringing tiny umbrellas
In case of bad weather

When they’ve eaten their fill
Of fried boggin and grit
They go back to work
At least for a bit

When the long day is over
And their work is all done
They all meet at Hop House
To have lots of fun

They dance to the music
Of a hootbobble horn
They dance and they dance
Until it is morn

One by one they go back
To their tree for a bit
Yawning and stretching
They sleep and they sit

When the sun comes up
To announce the new day
They dress in their puff caps
To work and to play

Ju Jube trees are not many
They’re quite hard to see
The wee ones that live there
Are sly as can be

They hide on high branches
Near green nobble nookers
They sit there on purpose
To hide from the lookers

If you get a glimpse
Of their sparkle scoo blue
Please look very close
They just might wink at you!


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Cherry Bieber  19 Oct 2006
This really is sweet! It gives one a happy song and dance feeling - child or not! I have written a great deal for children and I Love creating sweet, innocent fantasy for them. You have done this very, very well! Thank you for sharing!
Robin Heckman 16 Sep 2006
I love this poem. I have a passion for writing for children and reading to children and I would definitely have a blast reading this to my own kids!!! The flow is wonderful and the story is so fun. The only critique I could come up with is that maybe "They dance and they dance Until it is morn", could be "until almost morn" since they go back to their tree until the sun comes up. I would so love to see this as a picture book!!!!
Rebekah Bentley 11 Sep 2006
What an absolutely delightful poem! I too, like to write children's poetry. I can imagine this as a picture book that quickly becomes a child's favorite. Blessings, Rebekah
Karie Spiller 29 Aug 2006
I liked it. It is cute. I wonder what those little Ju Jube's look like. It's rather dr. Seussish and that is cool. You have a great imagination.
Kenn Allan 29 Aug 2006
This is cute! Kids will love the imaginative terms and characters. As one who has recently investigated the possibility of writing children's verse, let me pass on a couple of things I've learned. For some reason, kids prefer longer sentences - they seem to read easier. If you take your four-line stanzas and melt them into two, your poem will read more like a story with each line rhyming with the one preceeding. Then stanzas can be combined into paragraphs, much like traditional writing (kids have no respect for traditional format - they just want to have fun). Perhaps there should be a hint as to the wee folk's purpose. Do they stick around to paint the leaves in the Ju Jube tree in autumn? Do they look after lost travelers in the forest? Sprinkle dew on morning flowers? These are mere suggestions - as it stands, your poem would make an adorable picture book.




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