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In The Desert
by Victoria Dame
06/09/06
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In the desert you were there
While the bombs burst into the air
This mission was Desert Storm
And in this place you would transform
Your soul was left with a big tear

The sun shined on you with a glare
The sounds of the war it did scare
You with its loud distructive form
And this was always just the norm
In the desert

Your immortal soul it did spare
For God heard our pleading prayer
Operation Desert Storm
Sent back a man that was lukewarm
I want back my man that was there
In the desert


This poem is called a Rondeau this is the pattern or form I followed.
RRRR ... a - Opening line; the first words of the line
('RRRR') become the refrain.
a - 2nd line uses 1st rhyme.
b - 3rd line introduces 2nd rhyme.
b - 4th line uses 2nd rhyme.
a - 5th line uses 1st rhyme and closes opening quintet stanza.

a - 1st line of 2nd stanza uses 1st rhyme;
the first 3 lines of the 2nd stanza rhyme in the same
pattern as the first 3 lines of the 1st stanza.
a - 2nd line uses 1st rhyme.
b - 3rd line uses 2nd rhyme.
RRRR - 4th line repeats refrain of the opening line,
and concludes the quatrain stanza.

a - 1st line of 3rd stanza uses 1st rhyme;
the first 5 lines of the 3rd stanza rhyme in the same
pattern as the first 5 lines of the 1st stanza.
a - 2nd line uses 1st rhyme.
b - 3rd line uses 2nd rhyme.
b - 4th line uses 2nd rhyme.
a - 5th line uses 1st rhyme.
RRRR - 6th line repeats refrain of the opening line,
and concludes the sestet stanza.





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