Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Forums Join
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
E
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  



The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!



 
Poetry PLEASE ENCOURAGE THE AUTHOR BY COMMENTING

  LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE   SEND A PRIVATE MESSAGE
  HIRE THIS WRITER
REPORT ARTICLE

 TRACK THIS AUTHOR ADD TO MY FAVORITES
corner
What's New
 
corner
 
Reclaiming Eden
by Melanie Kerr 
04/28/06
Free to Share
Author requests article critique


  Mail
 






"I've done what I set out to do
His image in them marred.
They leave this paradise of His
With lives forever scarred"

The glorious snake with glinting scales
Slid sinuously on the ground
A crafty reptile, sleek and sly
He moved without a sound

"I've soiled His love for human kind
I've wrecked His precious plan
Can Eden ever be reclaimed?
Oh No! It never can!"

Then fluttered down a peaceful bird
A pure and gentle dove
"You foolish snake, you cannot see
You're wrong about His love"

"Before this world came into being
He saw this tragic day
And in His mind conceived a plan
To wash this sin away"

"The woman's seed will crush your head.
A promise, firm and true
He will reclaim the lives you stained
Despite all you can do."

"His love bars them from Eden's tree
This tree - the Tree of Life
To eat this fruit their lives would be
Unending, full of strife."

"Some day they will return with joy
And take their rightful place
And gaze on Him with wondrous love
And know His awesome grace"


If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be! TRUST JESUS NOW

Read more articles by Melanie Kerr  or search for articles on the same topic or others.


Read More - Free Reprints, Main Site Articles, Most Read Articles or highly acclaimed Challenge Articles. Read Great New Release Christian Books for FREE in our Free Reads for Reviews Program. Christian writers can JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and help spread the Gospel.


The opinions expressed by authors do not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.

Hire a Christian Writer, Christian Writer Wanted, Christian Writer Needed, Christian Content Needed
Find a Christian Editor, Hire a Christian Editor, Christian Editor, Find a Christian Writer
 
corner
Corner
This article has been read 1651 times     < Previous | Next >


Member Comments
Member Date
Anne Linington 08 Mar 2009
This is a great poetic telling of the Eden narrative; Myown effort "Demon Dare" in the Challenge shows Satan in his true light- I hope. It wasn't to everyone's taste: the Jury's out, but I enjoyed doing it. Anne.
Jesus Puppy  29 Apr 2006
Very well done. Brings a good view of the love God has for man, even when they were cast out... Good job Mel.
Pat Guy  29 Apr 2006
Wow Melanie! This is great! I loved it! I loved the insight about Satan being wrong about God's love.
Linda Watson Owen 29 Apr 2006
Ooh, I like this one a lot! I especially like the use of 'slid sinuously' to describe the serpent...great use of alliteration. The 's' sound is perfect for the hiss of the snake, and of course the 'sin' in 'sinuously' is brilliant!! Love it!!
James Koppen 28 Apr 2006
Very nicely done. I really enjoyed the piece. You provided a great picture of the Soundless Serpent, and the hope for our return. One Thought: "Before this world came into being He saw this tragic day" If you wrote "Before this world came to be" it seems to have better cadence. I loved this work. Jim




TRUST JESUS TODAY











Free Audio Bible
500 Plus Languages
Faith Comes By Hearing.com