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Unforgiving Spirit
by Joyce Reed
03/29/06
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U – makes you unclean
N – makes you negative
F – makes it hard to forget
O – makes you oppressed
R – makes you reluctant in loving someone
G – holds you from giving your 100 %
I – insists on staying depressed
V – makes you vulnerable to evil
E – endlessly questions you
N – nurtures evil
E – encourages other sins
S – stunts your personal/spiritual growth
S – makes you sinful

Unforgiving is the spirit I have
The burden of which I can no more have
From a small opening a light peeps into my heart
But it’s difficult to break enemy’s all dart

No matter where, when, and how much I try
Something always creeps in and I tend to cry
Teach me O God to be patient and mum
To take up the blame for whatever it may come

To forgive and forget is the hardest of all
I stand by it, I stand by it, and then I fall
Help me to remember You had done no evil
But for a sinner like me You we had you kill

The nail that pierced your hand, surely did it pain
Your heart must have cried like when Abel was killed by Cain
People were screaming, crying, and it was scorching hot
Re-build my mind to walking in your anointing and to walk with Satan not

Only,
Joy

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Joshua Hunter 08 Oct 2008
__Keep your focus on Christ whatever you may be hurting through Joyce. I am doing well, still writing and now approaching a point where I can/will make a living off of it. Pray for more passion.__ "Unforgiving Spirit" **Seriously cool: Combining acrostic with poetry made for a unique reading experience--your specific signature--I've often wondered that of my writing. *You're back in your element; you do the one-two, or couplet style rhyming, with ease having short lines and simple rhythm: "Teach me O God to be patient and mum, To take up the blame for whatever it may come." That one was my favorite. ***Seriously, edit: Perhaps your grammar mistakes are becoming fewer, but I've found four so far. "Unforgiving is the spirit I have" (don't you mean 'unforgiveness' since that's the word you made the acrostic for?); "But it’s difficult to break (the) enemy’s all dart" (makes no sense, remove 'all' and place an apostrophe 's' after 'dart') and; "But for a sinner like me You we had you kill" (yes you could say that "we" had God kill Himself, but that makes God look weak, I think you meant '...we had to kill'). **You could have come up with a rhyme for the first couplet! Using the same word slows the poem's momentum, "Unforgiving is the spirit I have The burden of which (labels me as above acrostic tag?) *Finally, I'd contend that some of the lines in your acrostic should only have a single word explaining them, specifically, U,N,O,G,V, and the last S. An acrostic is most affective when its' words are to the point. So, you don't need to say "makes you," that's understood. __As far as content goes it is both good and Godly, I can always count on your prose to glorify the good Lord. He is who the unforgiving person needs to help them forgive. Now, if you'd just stop botching English grammar you could get your point across clearer! Thanks for writing this Joyce, hope I'll hear from you.__




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