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I'll Bless You
by Joyce Reed
03/24/06
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When everything turns out wrong and nothing seems correct
I値l Bless You
When it rains heavily and I find no shelter
I値l Bless You
When the things don稚 seem to work my way
I値l Bless You
When my heart cries and face puts on a smile
I値l Bless You
When there is so much to say and no one to hear
I値l Still Bless You
When the sun is on top of head and no tree to shade
I値l Bless You
When everyone departs and no one is near
I値l Bless You
When tears roll down my cheek and no one wipes
I値l Bless You
When I try hard to win and still lose everything
I値l Bless You
For You, O Lord, have loved me alone when all were gone
Forevermore I値l Bless You


Only,
Joy


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Joshua Hunter 06 Feb 2008
__Hello Joyce and how is your walk with God doing? I haven稚 heard back from you in a while, I hope you are still getting these reviews. I also notice you haven稚 written anything in a while用erhaps you need encouragement. Philippians 3:1, 的t is no trouble for me to write the same things to you again, and it is a safeguard for you. Everything Paul wrote was about Christ, everything we write is about Christ, and because it痴 the only subject we write about it tends to build ennui quickly within us. If you feel that way don稚 linger on those thoughts, think about those people you are helping to safeguard from sinfulness. 的値l Bless You *OK!: It痴 said that a song is simply poetry set to music and I commend you, this poem has a structure to it that simply yells to be put to music; and in fact I did as I read! This call and response style was wonderfully performed and to a proper length, in my view, so as not to cheapen the distressed, down and out mood of the poet. **What pleasant symmetry this poem has as well. Four lines of 的値l Bless You, then a division: 的値l Still Bless You; another four lines of 的値l Bless You, then a concluding couplet ending in the same phrase. This piece has a brevity and compactness like that of a Shakespearian or Petrarchan Sonnet. I might encourage you to familiarize yourself with this kind of poetry and deviate from it creating a style of your own--you certainly have the skill. *Oh no!: Readability the smallest of matters, yet still the most prevailing. I知 certain (though I can稚 be entirely sure when it comes to poetry) that you meant for a correct English understanding in these lines: 展hen the things don稚 seem to work my way, and 展hen the sun is on top of head and no tree to shade. Please revise. **While I am impressed with this poem intellectually, spiritually I am most bland; as was the case concerning 鼎ast Your Burden onto Jesus, this poem seems too easy. You致e expressed yourself concerning a believer痴 struggle to bless God during the tough times but in a very clich, non-personal manner葉oo easy. - 糎hen that page draws first blood and my first impulse is to cruse, I値l Bless You. 前n that dreary day I watched Auntie Ella die in her sins, I値l Bless You. - Do you see the difference? While the audience may not be personally experiencing the scenes you describe they will empathize and all the more be sensitive to that stark contrast conveyed: 的 WILL BLESS YOU! That said, you might try building up to this main idea by beginning with clich and climaxing with personal lines, otherwise it痴 a nice song. __Thank you for writing this piece, I do enjoy my time examining your creativity given from on high. Keep writing songs for the Lord, making them ever more authentic by mixing pieces of your life experience in them. Come comment on my works sometime, I could use the support, but even if you don稚 I値l still Bless God.
Patricia Backora 16 May 2006
Bless you, too, Joy, what a lift I got from this poem! Joy is my daughter's name, and it's a good name for happy people!
Alfreda Byars 24 Mar 2006
I loved your poem, I was kind of down when I read it and it reminded me, no matter what, I vow to bless him. Thank you God Bless you.




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