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by Pat Guy 
01/22/06
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Gripping the side of her bed, Noreli stared at the floor. For once her mind was blank and empty. She had nowhere to go and no desire to move. She wasn’t hungry this morning so she shuffled off to the bathroom to take a shower – it never helped.


Gripping the side of her bed, Chariss stared at the floor. Her mind was racing – uneasy. She knew what she had to do but she had no desire to get moving. She wasn’t hungry this morning so she shuffled off to the bathroom to take a shower. For once she’d enjoy the cleansing feel of the hot water.


***

Chariss hesitated in front of her sister’s apartment. Disgust mingled with concern as she wondered, Why does she always have to live in such a dump? She could live with me and we both could save some money. Her fingers ached from their grip on the steering wheel as taunting thoughts continued to hold her back. This is NOT a good day.

She glanced over to the apartment and noticed her sister motioning for her to come in, ‘Oooh boy, this is it.’


***


‘I could hear your junk heap a mile away, Char.’

‘Well, if we lived together maybe we both could do better.’

‘Ok, ok. You have breakfast?’

‘No, I’m not hungry Nori.’

‘How ‘bout some coffee?’

‘Sounds good – fresh ground?’

‘Yep, as always lil’ sis!’

While Noreli busied herself with preparing the French Press, Chariss waited silently, fidgeting around the small living room.

‘Ok Char. Out with it. You sit outside like a scared rabbit forever, and now you can’t sit still. So ok - it’s Creep’s birthday. Who cares? I’m glad he’s dead! I’m glad he suffered. He deserved it and I wished I could’ve seen it! The only good thing he did was not tell anybody. If I’d known I …’

‘What Nori … if you’d known … what would’ve you done? Pull the plug? Remember what you told dad when you left?’

Noreli hesitated – her heart quickened, ‘… What do you mean?’

‘You know … .’

‘… Char … what do you mean?’

‘You know … if he ever … .’

Staring at Chariss’ lowered gaze Noreli spoke cold, controlled, as she rushed to her sister, ‘That creep! I – told – him … ’

She barely contained the volcanic anger threatening to surface as she embraced her sister’s trembling body. ‘I told him … if he ever touched you … I’d kill ‘im! I meant it! It’s why I came around sometimes … to make sure … he’d better not … I’d …’

‘I know Nori … I know you did … it didn’t … stop.’

Noreli dropped to the couch covering her face, ‘He put it on you, didn’t he?

‘Nori! Nori! That’s not why I’m here! I need to tell you something else!’

Anger quickly turned to guilt as Noreli tried to push away her shame, ‘Why didn’t you tell me Char! Why didn’t you tell me! … He told me… he said … Oh Char … I’m so sorry …why didn’t I … ? If I’d only known …’

‘You would’ve what Nori? Then what? You would’ve been taken away from me. You’d be in jail. I couldn’t …’

‘So? I have no life now … what does it matter? At least …’

‘Nori. You have FOREVER! Don’t let him do this!’

‘What are you talking about?’

‘I’ve found a way … to forget – a way for it to go away.’

‘Char … DON’T – even – go there, if your gonna talk about God! What good is God when he doesn’t hear kids so scared they’re cryin and beggin’ Him to make ‘it’ go way? And He DOESN’T! … Just DON’T!’

‘Nori, you know what I found out though? It’s all gonna be gone one day! For REAL! Everything’s gonna be new again. Even us Nori! ‘It’ll’ be gone …forever … and we won’t remember. We won’t remember … ever again! Don’t let him take this away too! Please Nori! We can be together – we can be free … it’ll happen …REALLY! Please … I …’

‘Tell me Char… what about Creep’s? Where will HE be? I want to see him burning in HELL! I want to watch him scream and beg!! THAT’S what’ll make me feel good. To know HE’s bein’ tortured … forever! That’s all I want.’

Noreli turned away from the Hope in her sister’s eyes, yet her heart ached for the Life that shone on her face. She didn’t want to take that away from her. She loved her too much. Whatever it was – her sister had found a way… a way to escape this torture … If only …

She bolted from the couch to escape these thoughts not realizing her sigh betrayed the desperation that consumed her life. She glanced back at Chariss – tears stung, deep and sharp …

If only she …










Rev. 21:1,5a (NIV) 'Then I saw a new heaven and a new earth, for the first heaven and the first earth had passed away ... He who was seated on the throne said, “I am making everything new!’


Pat Guy
©2006
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