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by Marilyn Schnepp 
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An angel was talking to the Lord one day,
As they walked in heaven beside the bay.
"Look, my Lord", the angel said,
Then pointed to a mansion on a hill up ahead!

"Now there is a mansion of class and style!
And the only one like it for many a mile.
But tell me, Lord, who lives there?
Why does it seem so empty and bare?"

The Lord looked up at the house on the hill,
At the magnificent mansion so quiet and still;
Then tears filled His eyes, and He bowed His head,
Was silent a moment - and then He said:

"Yes, my angel, it's a special design,
It was custom-made for a child of mine.
She specifically asked for a home by the sea
Where she could live for Eternity.

"She loved the sound of the ocean's roar
As white-capped waves rolled into shore.
And loved to feel the rhythmic beat
As surf met sand beneath her feet.

"So often on Earth she'd go to the sea
Whenever she needed to talk with me.
She'd stroll alone on the sunlit sand.
And I would reach down and take her hand.

"Yes", He continued, "I loved her so!
And she never owned a home you know.
So I built her home overlooking the sea
Where I knew she'd be happy, content and free.

"But when it came time to call her home,
She'd chosen the world with it's glitter and chrome!
So you see, my angel, it's an empty shrine,
Just an old memory or that child of mine."

All of a sudden I awoke with a start!
The only sound was the beat of my heart!
Oh! That beautiful mansion on a cliff by the sea
Was only a dream, but it was mine, you see!

So I made up my mind right then and there,
My Mansion would NOT stand empty and bare!
So I got out of bed and knelt in prayer -
And promised my Lord I'd meet Him up there!"

John 14: 2 "In my father's house are
many mansions; if it were not so I would have told you...."

If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be! TRUST JESUS NOW

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Verna Cole Mitchell  05 Feb 2007
I loved this! When I was a little girl, there was a song often sung at church "Build Me a Cabin in the Corner of Gloryland." My mother never liked that song. She said that she wanted a mansion, and I'm confident she's living in hers now!
David Story 15 Aug 2006
Up early (4:30 am) and browsing, and I came across your poem. For me - a great reminder to live for Him every day. Very nice. Thanks for the morning devotional.
Chat-A-Book Group 29 Jan 2006
Beautiful! I agree that the theology is confusing, though. Wonderful images in the poetry. :-)
Amy Michelle Wiley  29 Jan 2006
Ooops, that Chat-A-Book was me. I forgot I was logged on in that account, lol.
Marilyn Schnepp  29 Jan 2006
Footnote from the Author: There are many different beliefs in the Christian Faith; therefore, those who believe "Once Saved, Always Saved" - will find a discrepancy here; however, I believe I must choose to follow Him every day...and if I turn my back on Him and follow the world...my Mansion Will Be Empty. So, I wrote this poem in MY BELIEF. But thank you all for reading my poem and for your kind comments; they are sincerely appreciated...and thanks to Jan for featuring my poem this week! God BLess!
Tony Rowsey 27 Jan 2006
A very lovely and wonderful piece of work. It shows great imagination, and artistic flair, and has a powerful message that every reader should take heed to. God bless.
David Yuen 26 Jan 2006
Marilyn, I enjoyed the peom very much and you did capture lots of colorful emotions in it. Kudos to you! However, there is one thing a little misleading about this poem that you may want to consider. According to the Bible, once someone is saved, they are saved forever, even if they do become worldly later on. However, this poem seems to faintly imply that because the speaker became worldly, it somehow costed her salvation. If the speaker was saved before, this cannot happen. Of course you could have it that this poem relates to heavenly rewards and treasure, which, in that case, would be more correct. But anyway, I just thought it might be good for me to just point this out. It's still a good poem anyway.
Kenny Blade 25 Jan 2006
Great work! I am not a poem guy, but you sucked me in and I can honestly say it's one of the best I've ever read... I like the message of course, but filtering the emotions of our Maker through this made it richer by far! - KB
Mitzi Busby 25 Jan 2006
Wow, this is super. Really makes you think.
Phyllis Inniss  23 Jan 2006
I like the rhythm and the message.
Nancy Leaf 26 Nov 2005
This has a nice rythmic flow to it. I like the ending. Thanks for sharing. Nan


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