Yes, I too saw the title and thought to take a look - one of the things that the Lord has been showing me about "capturing the attention" with the title...I loved the passion within your piece and as I posted somewhere yesterday, the enemy IS on the prowl here...Praise God that we have the victory in Christ though!...Lovely reminder that all that we do, we do for Him first and foremost, and if He chooses to make it pubic, then so be it - if not, then it remains our `personal` gift to Him..bit like the perfume from Mary...Have you noticed that writing becomes a sort of "therapy" for us? - We speak and God counsels us? The only bit I winced at was when you wrote "you are nothing..." I know in what sense you meant it but for a moment it seemed that you were once again relegated to that of a fallen worm - which is not the case of course, cos we are "the apple of His eye" and "holy and dearly loved"..good stuff Cynthia - thank you.
Nice job. I know that enemy, he was bugging me earlier today, he was a little more subtle with me, but it was the same enemy. That's what makes this piece really good, we all can relate to it on one level or another. One of the things I noticed, that I try to avoid, is starting multiple sentences with the same word in the same paragraph. In the first paragraph a number of sentences begin with "I" However, it seems to work with this piece. In the next paragraph you contrast by starting a number of sentences with "You" The repetition adds to the frantic nature of the moment, so I don't know if I would make many changes. The last paragraph, publish x amount of books. I would use a word instead of x, once I realized what you meant it made perfect sense but for a moment it made me stumble. I'm tired from working all day, but I saw the title, thought I'd take a look and then couldn't stop reading. Thanks