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The Red Head Angel Revised
by chandra mathis
08/05/05
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I rewrote this story, this is the new version. I left the old version of the Red Head Angel in place,because I would like comparisons between the two done and let me know ,if this this version is better. I appreciate all your comments Thank you so much. Blessings,Chandra Mathis


Growing up can be one of life's most challenging accomplishments. During the preteen years some lasting impressions can be made.The words we speak to others will build or tear down.How we use our words will be the out come of what it was intended for.Words can be like daggers that pierce the soul and make wounds that last a life time. Be careful for what you say, you never know the damage that your words will bring someday.We reap what we sow.

She was an awkward child with long red hair that was wiry. She had an overbite that stood out like the full moon on a clear night. Not to mention her tallness that everyone seemed to notice.

Carla had just had her twelfth birthday . Already she was beginning to feel the pressure of those ugly duckling years. She was thinking ,"is this how my life is going to be?"
None of the girls from her school came to her birthday party, she had passed out invitations to everyone. She sat there in utter despair, and the tears came flowing down.
Her mother reached with her apron and wiped her face, "It's all right my little red head angel" "The Lord loves you, and so do I ." "Oh, mama I don't know why they didn't come?" " Why would they be so cruel?" "I am sure they will have a good explanation" her mama said. Carla jumped up from the table, screaming out loud." I hate them all," and ran out of the house.

There was a little park not far from the house. Carla was sitting there on one of the benches with her head bent down. She had been crying.
Two of the girls from her school happened to be walking by, and noticed her. Carla saw them coming and she wanted to run ,but it was to late.

These two girls were her worst nightmare. They had been the ones at the front-line of all the ridicule she had received at school.
She waited in fear and dread while they approached her. Her stomach was beginning to hurt."Here it comes," she was thinking.

Mary was the first one to speak." What you doing sitting there like a knot on the log?" "Did your mama through you out, because you are so ugly that you made her sick?"
Alice said, "I know why she is here, because her hair is so red her mama can't stand the sight of her." She reaches over and messes up Carla's hair. Mary, who was chewing bubble gum , took the gum from her mouth and put it in Carla's hair.
Carla was screaming, "get your hands off me, leave me alone", with sobs inbetween.
The two girls pushed her off the bench and rubbed dirt all over Carla's birthday dress.


She was devastated as she made her way back home. "I am so tired of living this way." she was thinking. She thought about how it would be to die and just go on to heaven.
She needed her Grandmother so much right now to comfort her. Grandmother was in heaven.

When she came through the front door, she was crying so hard that she could hardly catch her breath. Her heart was wounded and she was feeling like the most unloved person
in this world. Her mother ran to her quickly and held her in her arms ." Oh, my little red head angel, please don't cry.""Life is filled with bitter words and lonely roads, but we have Jesus to carry us along the way." Carla was thinking,"I don't care anymore." " I hate this red hair."

The next morning , Carla was up at the crack of dawn. She went into her mother's sewing room and took her mother's sewing scissors out of the basket.Then she went into the bathroom and stood up on the toilet seat so she could see in the mirror.Strand by strand of long red,wiry locks fell to the ground. Her mother walked in and saw her. She let out a gasp," my little red head angel what have you done?" Carla said, with hatred in her voice, "I couldn't live with this ugly hair any longer." "I had to do it mama." "Now I will have to take you to the beauty shop," her mother proclaimed.

The next day at school, Carla came walking down the hall. All the kids were laughing at her, because her hair was short and stuck out even more. They laughed and taunted her. "You look like a clown, only you are ugly." She went and hid in the bathroom for the rest of the day.

The teacher was concerned for Carla, she wrote her mother a note. "I have noticed that Carla has stopped talking and she isn't eating her lunch." "Is there something wrong at home?"
" Please see me right away so we can talk."

Carla's mother found the note in her daughter's lunch box. Tears filled her eyes. She didn't realize that her daughter was going through so much at school.

She met with Carla's teacher,and they had a long talk. The teacher said," I think Carla is suffering from depression,even her grades have fallen lately." " My daughter depressed, why I have never heard of such."

The following day, Carla's mother decided to take her to see the doctor. After the doctor had talked to Carla, he came out and told her mama the news. "Your daughter is very disturbed, she has a poor self image and thinks about killing herself all the time." " Did you know that?"
" No," her mama cried." Not my red head angel." They left and went home. The two of them hand in hand walking slowly. Carla's mother began to pray out loud. "Oh Jesus please help us, help me to make everything all right for my little Carla." She began to quote Psalm 32: 6-7 to her daughter. Something clicked in Carla's heart. At that moment she could see a ray of hope peeking out from the gray clouds that were hovering over her." You are right mama." "I know that Jesus will deliver me and preserve me from trouble."
" I can feel it in my heart.""I believe it mama." " I am going to start living for Jesus now" ." I will never let those girls hurt me any more with their evil words."

Carla's mother wanted to do something to help improve her daughter's self image.She found out after calling her company that her insurance would pay for Carla to have braces for her teeth. ."This is what my Carla needs".Carla came in from school and her mother gave her the good news." I am going to take you to the dentist Carla and get those teeth of yours fixed." "Once your teeth are fixed,you will have a perfect smile and no more overbite" Carla went to dancing around the room. She was in heaven.

Two years later, Carla and her mama were at the dentist . It was time for the braces to come off. Finally , the day had arrived. Carla was ready to see the finished product. The Dentist removed the braces and Carla was looking at herself in frozen amazement." I look so beautiful."Her mother was standing near and began to cry. "I am taking you out to lunch and then we are going to the beauty shop to have your hair done." Mary and Alice are going to be so jealous of you when they see your new look." Oh! mama, you are the best."
The beautician cut her hair into the most popular hair style and then she put a treatment on it to tame it down a bit. Her hair was firey red with a shine to it . It is gorgous. The color of her hair made her green eyes stand out like pale emeralds.Her mother was so pleased with the outcome." The ugly duckling is gone forever."
" Now it is just a beautiful young lady that I see." " My beautiful red head angel." Her mother was crying again. On the way home, they went shopping. Her mother bought Carla a whole new wardrobe."Mama, you are the best in the world."

It was Homecoming Day , the crowd was standing all aound to see the Homecoming Queen. "There she is" , mama cried with joy. My beautiful red head angel." She is so beautiful."
Mary and Alice were there too. Peering behind the crowd." I can't believe she got Homecoming Queen" Mary said. Then her friend Alice said,"after all these years you still can't say anything nice about anyone." " You know Mary,you may have looks on the outside, but your heart is wicked and dark on the inside, you will always be empty because you have no love for others." "I am sorry that I spent so much time with you instead of Carla."
" She is the better person here." " You could learn alot from her." " Another thing,be careful with your words, you will reap what you have sown."

If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be! TRUST JESUS NOW

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