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Wayward Soul
by Teri Van Pelt
09/08/04
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The Wayward Soul

The wayward soul
is on its way home
from roaming two and fro.

The loneliness
it could not bear
finding no one at home.

The meeting of itself
took a toll
and homeward bound it went.

It was time
to come back home
from the place which it was sent.

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Roger Crane 10 Sep 2004
Teri, Look at "bare" also. Should be "bear." Poem is okay as far as it goes, as Glen said. Ask yourself, what am I trying to say here? then try to read the poem as if you did not write it. Can you get that message? What is your theme?--I could not tell. If you are talking about a demon, then you sound somewhat sympathetic. RC
WENDY DECKER 10 Sep 2004
Yes, there was an error or two, but i think i got your poem. It was clear to me what you were trying to say.
Glenn A. Hascall 09 Sep 2004
Teri, Thought provoking and has great visual presence. I might try to expand the idea just a bit it seems a bit short. Oh, you also used the word two in the second stanza - I think the word should be 'to'. Keep writing. :-) Glenn




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