The wayward soul
is on its way home
from roaming two and fro.
The loneliness
it could not bear
finding no one at home.
The meeting of itself
took a toll
and homeward bound it went.
It was time
to come back home
from the place which it was sent.
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Teri,
Look at "bare" also. Should be "bear."
Poem is okay as far as it goes, as Glen said.
Ask yourself, what am I trying to say here? then try to read the poem as if you did not write it. Can you get that message? What is your theme?--I could not tell. If you are talking about a demon, then you sound somewhat sympathetic.
RC
Teri,
Thought provoking and has great visual presence. I might try to expand the idea just a bit it seems a bit short. Oh, you also used the word two in the second stanza - I think the word should be 'to'. Keep writing. :-)
Glenn
