This poem spoke directly to my heart and I want to thank you for it. It was inspiring and so true. I deal with this on a daily basis; one moment I am full of trust in God and the next I am sinking fast. However, God is always there to pull me out and save me from drowning. Bravo to you and praises be to the Most High.
I would agree with all above critiques in respect to your theme, content and message.
As to poetic elements, your poem reminds me of my poetry a long time ago (I'm OLD, but NOT suggesting that you need a lot of time to improve). A bit stilted in structure, perhaps too regular. Too obvious in rhyming. Still, I think you have lots of potential! By the way, I too am a teacher, and I can identify with your comment about witnessing, etc. We must pick our opportunities. If students wish to talk, then we are in our rights to answer with our opinions honestly, and I have done that. I think that your character and the Spirit of Christ is probably the most telling thing which witnesses. God Bless, Roger Dee (Crane)
Wonderful word pictures that co-exist on two levels 1) the original story of Peter and 2) our own misgivings about life and our place in this world. This is very beautiful and so relatable. -- Glenn
Thank you for this humble picture you've painted, reminding us that we are to stay focused on Him. We could make life so easier for ourselves if we could just keep that in the forefront... but it seems it's a lesson we have to learn over and over. Fantastic writing!
Absolutely beautiful. You painted a picture with your words so vivid I could see myself stepping out of the boat and then being rescued by our Jesus. I very much related to this poem. Great writing!!