Your love is better than wine
Better than grapes picked from a hotel’s vine.
Your love is better than life
Better than the world’s dished up lies.
Your love is better than power
Satifies more than the top of the tower.
Your love is better than things
Fading novelty doesn’t make me sing.
Your love gave me a brand new start
Gave me new hope gave me a new heart.
Your love gets me out of bed
A new way to think that sorted out my head.
Your love changes how I feel
Emotions now built on things that are real.
Your love takes me off the shelf
Your love is better than life itself.
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This is such a beautiful poem. The passion in your words flows off the page and right into my heart. I noticed some tiny things you might want to consider: In this line: Your love get me out of bed
your verb doesn't match your noun. It should be gets
And on the shelf line, you switched to past tense while all along you used present. I can see took working, but if you are trying to describe time in the way God sees it (which simplified means everything is in the present) you might want to change took to takes. Those are tiny details, and if you're like me, you'll probably tweak your poems each time you read them. I think your message is awesome and you touched my heart.
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