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Raptured Together
by Bob Gotti
12/09/12
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My friend, when I depart this life, I desire to leave with my wife,
Itís not the question of if, but when, as we are both Born Again;
With death hanging over my head, I want to be raptured instead,
So my wife and I may go together, to join with The Lord forever.

With death a persistent possibility, Christ could part her and me,
Up from the shared path we roam, The Lord could call me home;
But a separation is not final friend, as our real lives have no end,
With our hope, we have in Christ; we shall both enter Eternal Life.

How and when, we canít choose, but knowing Him, we canít lose,
With this hope that we both share, in due time weíll both be there,
Up in the place prepared for us, to be with our Lord, Christ Jesus,
When there together, we will see, that glorious time called eternity.

In life, weíve been led by Grace, being together in time and place,
Through our time God truly has, provided His grace at every path,
In those times of peace and strife, His grace led me and my wife,
So friend, whatever the tides, His Grace is in whatever He decides.

Knowing our frames are but dust, in The Lord, we both must trust,
In this time, we donít understand, we know that we are in His hand,
So, not knowing what lies ahead, we both rely on our Lord instead,
But I still desire to go together, both raptured up, with God forever.

If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be! TRUST JESUS NOW

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Rick Henks 09 Dec 2012
I certainly appreciate the message of your poem. Based on your request for critique, I will mention a few comments and make some suggestions. First, I am unsure of why certain words are capitalized in the lines (i.e., Born Again). I wonder about that. Second, for me, when poetry attempts to have rhyme, it should also have good flow. Generally, that comes from even syllable counts. For example, I will provide a possible modification for your first stanza. My friend, when I depart this life, I desire to leave it with my wife, It's not a question of if, but when, as we have both been born again. With death now hanging oer my head, far better be raptured instead, My wife and I leave here together, to then be with the Lord forever. My suggestion would be to see about evening out the word flow in the portions of the lines. Another possible option might be to break up each stanza as it now exists into two separate stanzas, and break each current long line into two. I hope this is of some help. Thanks for sharing it with us.




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