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The Strangelands
by James Robot
10/25/12
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The Strange-lands.




In a place, so far from here, in all the places far from dear, she stood so wary enthralled in fear and never knowing where was here in the place of floating rocks.
She'd traveled forests and mountains high, and with enjoyment, gave a sigh, but though those problems always died, a problem that her fear did spy in the Strange-lands of the rocks.

Dawning cloak, she start her journey, taking bow and going early, faster running with great hurry, to a place of great she scurry, for orders she was told.
But upon reaching this dark place and, stepping off to view the Strange-lands, she walks about the glowing blue sand, fear takes hold her very mind strands, in this place of floating rocks.

Courage failing, she slumps down lower, then brings her knees up to her shoulder, she rocks a bit and looks about her, but the darkness near gets further darker, and she cries out fearfully.
Sorry was she for her wrongs, against her family in such great throngs, through her crying sings she a song, and such a tune is woebegone, to show her great despair.

Monster's closing on her quickly, she gets up and runs out swiftly, sword in hand and bow held tightly, running into darkness blindly, looking for a way out.
Making slashes and crying onward, then hitting something hard as wood-board, she looked through the hole she tearfully had bored, and while she stood, her being was floored, for escape that she had found.

Quickly slashing, pulling, breaking, she opens stone and rock and planking, more and more she keeps a striking, till at last an opening is awaking, to get her out of here.
Though so small and cramped it be, the escape had helped her flee, for what she saw was now indeed, a pathway to a light she see, at the end of a large tunnel.

But the battle isn't over yet, for leave she still had to effect, and if she lingered she will get, a scarring that she will regret, so she ran off to the light.
Monsters following, huffing, puffing: the light is closer brightening, shining!
Monsters slowing blinded, staggering: safety coming, closer and lightening!

On her own, the monsters kill, her very self and beyond her will, but with the light she can well still, defeat them all; by one, and till, they seem to disappear.
But even still, these monsters stay, she must run, the light will save, her from the creatures that growl and rave, and vow to send her to the grave, that plan to kill her off.

Finally near, the monster's gone, such a light that beams upon, she is so glad she jumps upon, a nearby rock and shouts among, the field of flowers near.
And with this joy, she walks away, for now that she has had her stay, it's homeward that she must go say, the message that she must convey, for it brings good news.

If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be! TRUST JESUS NOW

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Amy Michelle Wiley  07 Nov 2012
I like the ballad feel to this. I found the sentence structure and grammar issues made it a little hard to follow in places, but enjoyed the story.




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