I really enjoyed this piece. I think it's a lovely written one and it spoke to my heart. I noticed you didn't use punctuation and I respect and understand that as a style approach. However, there were lines that I stumbled over and if there had been a semi-colon or a comma it might have flown a tad better for me. In this line: just a semi-colon shows me where to pause and helps it flow off of my tongue. Help me say your truth with love; help me not deface
You've done a beautiful job with this piece and I could see it touching so many different people. You have a natural gift and with God guiding you, you will make a difference!