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Broken Spirit, Seeking Heart
by Dicky To
08/17/11
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This fictional story 'Love In His Guidance' unfolds a journey of a boy who is unknowingly guided by the Lord as he pours out his heart to seek happiness and a real ‘god’. Romance and Christian faith are woven into the storyline.

Chapter 1: Broken Spirit; Seeking Heart

In one corner of Hong Kong, Hang, at the age of 13, knelt before a large Buddha statue in a temple and clasped his hands in prayer. He closed his eyes and talked to this statue within his heart. He wondered if it could hear him. As a young boy, however, he just blindly followed what his mother instructed him.

After a moment of silence, he rose, walked beside his twin brother Cheung, stopped in front of their mother, and spoke to her, “Mom, we’re very hungry. May we go now?”

“Yes,” she replied.

Leaving the temple, the three of them went to a noodle shop for lunch. As usual, Hang ordered a bowl of beef congee and a bowl of wonton noodles. As he waited, he lowered his head and pondered the meaning of worshipping Buddha.

His parents always had brawls and neglected his feelings. He felt unloved and lonely no matter how wealthy his family was and how many expensive items his parents gave him. His spirit was damaged but no one seemed to care. He had been praying to such a god that it may turn things around for his family, but nothing had changed. Now he started to doubt if this so-called ‘living Buddha’ was real.

“Hang, are you all right?” Cheung elbowed him.

Hang’s head shot up as her brother’s gesture jolted him. He opened his mouth. “Um…yes, I’m fine.”

“Your food is here. Eat and then we need to go to the market before rush hour.” His mother checked the time on her wrist watch.

“OK.” He threw a glance at his brother, who was slurping his noodles. He shook his head to toss his thoughts away for the moment, then spooned his congee into his mouth.

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Half hour past twelve the same night, on the lower deck of a bunk bed in his bedroom, Hang folded his hands behind his head, sleepless. He once again steeped in thoughts of his family, his belief and his unhappy life. He wondered if there was some other ‘god’ who could hear his cry and understand him. He wondered if there was someone who would truly love him. But who was this God? Who was this person? How would he find them?


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Susan Michaels 17 Sep 2011
I like the way this story takes the reader right into the boy's life and family, well as his thoughts about life and faith. We often assume that people in Asia have found contentment and enlightenment in Buddha. In fact, many in the Western world and in Hollywood promote the Buddhist way of life. Yet here you have shown us a boy who bows to Buddha and finds no answers and who begins seeking. It will be so exciting to hear more of this story, Dicky!
collette mcfarland 20 Aug 2011
great story, can't wait for future installments, can you make them longer? P.S you accidently mixed her/his pronouns in this sentece.....Hang’s head shot up as her brother’s gesture jolted him
Jeanne E Webster  18 Aug 2011
Looking forward to more! How about more in-depth peek of Buddhism? We could understand more of your turmoil that is beginning to develop between the two beliefs. An excellent start here. Blessings.




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