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The Manatee
by Julie Michaelson
07/14/10
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So God
created
great sea
creatures
and
every living
thing
that
moves.
[Genesis 1:21]
***********************
"It's too BORING,
Lord."

"What is that,
My child."

"Writing for that new
website, 'GIFTEDWOMEN*'."
(Grimace.)

[CALM NOD.]
[WATCHING THE BP
COMPANY FOLKS
TRYING TO
PUT ANOTHER CAP ON
THE GULF OIL LEAK.]
[SHAKING HEAD IN
CONSTERNATION.]

"They're so STRICT!
I SENT them some of
my STORIES......and,
I got a NOTE back,
sayin',
'We don't accept stories
like this: only written
articles on culture, world
events, etc.'!"

[NODDING, PATIENTLY.]
[HOLD HAND UP TO ALLOW
A MESSENGER ANGEL INTO
THE THRONE ROOM.
ANGEL HAS JUST ARRIVED
FROM THE GULF OIL SPILL
AREA. HE IS CARRYING
AN OIL-COVERED MANATEE.]

"So......I wrote this
stupid aricle on how
I first came to JESUS,
because I was jealous
of the little Gentile kids'
chocolate BUNNY RABBITS;
YA know: those ones they
used to get at EASTER?"

[NODDING.]
[BECKON MESSENGER
ANGEL OVER TO THRONE
BY THE SPARKLING,
REFRESHING RIVER OF
LIFE.]
[ANGEL KNEELS BEFORE
THE THRONE, HOLDING
OUT THE BABY MANATEE.]
[NODDING TO HIS
GRUMPY CHILD BACK
ON EARTH.]
"Hm, hm."

"It was really STUPID."

[REACHES OUT TO CRADLE
BABY MANATEE IN HIS
ARMS. A DROP OF BLOOD-
ENCRUSTED OIL SLIDES
DOWN THE LITTLE
SEA CREATURE'S DEAD SKIN.]
"Why did you
write it,
My kin'der?"

(Look up, incredulously,
at the ceiling.)
"Because......it's TRUE!"

[CHUCKLE.]
[CONTINUE TO CRADLE
THE LITTLE MANATEE'S
SLOPING HEAD, PATTING
IT OVER, AND OVER.]

"But....it was BORING!
I like to write DIALOGUES,
and STORIES!"

[NOD.]
[LEAN OVER THE BABY MANATEE,
AND WHISPER A WORD,
UNINTELLIGIBLE TO
HUMANS.]
[THE LITTLE BABY
MANATEE WAKES UP.]

"My FAVORITE....is the
one about 'The Edge of
the Universe'! Did Ya
READ that, LORD?
THAT ONE was really
outta the BOX,
HUH?"

[CHUCKLE.]
"Ah.....the one
where you have
Me....
wearing cordoroy pants,
Mein kin'der?"

(Point, excitedly, up to the
ceiling.)
"YEAH!
THAT ONE, LORD!
WHAT'D YA...THINK?"

[PATIENT FROWN.]
[SHAKING HEAD.]
[PETTING THE LITTLE
SLOPING GREY HEAD OF
THE BABY MANATEE,
WHO IS NOW MAKING
LITTLE CHIRPING NOISES.
ITS BEAUTIFUL SKIN IS
NOW SOFT, SMOOTH
AND PERFECTLY LOVELY.]

(Squint up at the ceiling.)
"WELL?"

[BECKON TO ANOTHER
ANGEL STANDING AT
ATTENTION NEAR THE
RIVER OF LIFE.]
[THE ANGEL,
A RATHER SHORT, STOUT-LOOKING FELLOW
WITH PLUMP WINGS,
IMMEDIATELY TROTS OVER.
HE KNEELS BY THE
THRONE TOO, BUT HE
CAN'T DO IT FOR VERY
LONG WITHOUT TIPPING
OVER. HIS SHORT FAT
SWORD, WHICH HASN'T
BEEN USED FOR SEVENTY
YEARS AND THAT WAS ONLY
TO SWAT AT A SMALL NAT
IN THE AMISH COUNTRYSIDE
NEAR PHILADLEPHIA,
PENNSYLVANIA,
CLATTERS TO THE GOLD
TILED THRONE ROOM
FLOOR. (THE
NAT WAS FINE;
IT DODGED THE CLUMISLY STRUCK
FAT SWORD,
AND WENT ON
TO LIVE A LONG LIFE
WITH LOTS OF BABY NATS.)]
[PATIENT SIGH.]
[HAND THE SQUIRMING GRAY
BABY MANATEE OVER TO
THE CLUMSY, PLUMP-WINGED ANGEL.]
[SQUIRMING BABY MANATEE IS STILL
MAKING LOTS OF CHIRPING NOISES.]

(Impatient grimace
up at the ceiling.)
"SO......WHAT'D YA
THINK?"

[GAZE DOWN AT RUMPLED
CHILD, WHO IS HAVING
A DAY OFF AND
JUST WOKE UP ABOUT NOON,
AND IS STILL WEARING
HER FADED-PINK, FUR-COVERED,
RATTY BATHROBE.]
[NOD.]
[WATCH AS STOUT
ANGEL, WHOSE NAME IS
GEORGE, GENTLY CARRIES
BABY MANATEE TO THE
RIVER OF LIFE AND
CRADLES HIM INTO THE
FRESH, FLOWING WATER.
IMMEDIATELY, THE BABY
MANATEE WHOSE NAME
IS 'MITZEE', BEGINS TO
SPLASH WATER AND
EMIT VERY LOUD CHIRPS.]

(Shout to the ceiling.)
"WELL?"

[PATIENT NOD.]
"I think it was very
creative, child."

(Whiny shout.)
"BUT.....not GOOD?"

[SOLEMNLY NOD TO GEORGE,
WHO IS NOW REQUESTING IF HE
CAN TAKE A REST BY
THE SHADY EDGE OF THE RIVER
OF LIFE, SIT DOWN,
AND OPEN UP HIS BAG-
LUNCH.]

(Irritable yell.)
"HOW COME YA
THOUGHT IT WASN'T
GOOD?"

[SIGH.]
[SHAKING HEAD,
AND WATCHING AS
GEORGE TRIES TO OPEN
UP HIS LUNCH-SIZE BAG
OF SOUR CREAM-AND
-ONION-FLAVORED
RUFFLES POTATO CHIPS
AND ACCIDENTALLY
BREAKS OPEN THE BAG
AND A BUNCH OF POTATO
CHIPS FALL INTO
THE FRESH-FLOWING RIVER
OF LIFE. MITZEE SWIMS
OVER, AND NUDGES ONE
OF THE NOW-SOGGY
POTATO CHIPS.]
"I didn't say it wasn't
very good,
My child."

(Irritable shout.)
"Then what DID YA
SAY?"

[SMILING.]
[LEAN OVER TO PET
MITZEE'S VERY WET,
FRECKLED NOSE. LET
MITZEE REACH OUT HER
LONG TONGUE AND LICK
HIS HAND.]
"I said..."

"WHAT?"

[GIVE MITZEE A GENTLE
PAT ON THE SMOOTH,
SILKY, WET RUMP. WATCH
AS THE BEAUTIFUL LITTLE
MANATEE SWIMS OFF TO
JOIN HER OTHER FAMIY
MEMBERS IN THE
SPARKLING, FRESH WATER.]
[SMILE, FULL OF UNABASHED TEARS.]
"I said....
I
love
you."
*************************
And
God
saw
that
it
was
good.
[Genesis 1:21]


*Plus, the website
doesn't allow writers
to see if any/how many
readers have clicked
on their articles.
That dampens one's
enthusiasm.

_________________________
Dedicated
to all the
people and
wildlife
who have
suffered
from the
Gulf Oil Spill.




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