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Crawl from The Dark s3
by Corne Le Roux
02/26/10
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With the door closed behind them, they could start their meeting. Although "meeting" sounded too formal for Daniel, and although he would rather refer to it as "meeting up", it didnít bother him too much, as they did sometimes discuss more pivotal matters such as girls, sleepovers and on few occasions their personal lives.
'You might be wondering what I am doing here,í The hooded figure said looking straight at Daniel. 'I know we have only met a couple times, but your friends canít stop talking about you.' Daniel had no idea what she was on about, and it showed on his face. 'I have been watching you for weeks now, and must say; it's easy to understand why your friends here esteem you so high.' Her voice was soft and sweet, but at the same time demanded authority. Daniel found himself fixated to this hooded female, almost usurped.
'I donít understand.' Daniel said still gazing into the eyes of this mystical creature.
'I know dear Daniel, I know. All in due time.' She turned to the others, 'Please, dont let me interrupt your fun boys! I was in the area and thought I'd pop in - see what the fuss is all about.' She jumped, grabbed and pulled herself up onto the 8 foot concrete platform that formed part of the platform they were already standing on. The others followed suite.
From on top of the higher concrete platform you had a good view over a large part of the small town. The convent was built on a hill, and where they were standing was the highest point of the four story building. They chose this place as their meeting place for four reasons. One, the Jackal - as it was called because of the green painted Jackal on one of the walls of the lower concrete platform - offered some protection from outsider. Not many people knew of the Jackal, and even less ever dared going that far into the ominous building. Two, the Jackal was a good lookout position - offering a view of the only gravel road that led into the convent's grounds, most of the rest of the convent's vicinity (including the bordering fences) and because the top level of the Jackal was a small 16m2 platform on top of the convent with no other part of the building on either of the four sides, they could even by leaning over the back side of the platform see the only entrance passage that led to the Jackal. The third reason was that there was enough ways to escape those in uniform or whoever might try and catch them. There was a large roof to the south, and the main building's roof towards the north. Both had ample missing corrugated sheets so you could make your way from one side of the building to the other and then climb through one of the holes in the roof, climb through a hole in one of the ceiling boards, and land without to much pain in one of the many rooms of the convent, and disappear in it's maze of rooms, passageways, halls and secret passages. The last reason for choosing the Jackal as base was for the simple reason that the top platform had a small brick ledge where one could sit on. Although the seating wasnít all important, it sure helped when you spent hours there almost every second night.
The four friends took their usual seating places on the brick ledge, and the intriguing dark head seized the opportunity to go and sit right next to Daniel. She made Daniel feel slightly uncomfortable with all the mystery surrounding her, but at the same time he found it very appealing, almost drawn to her. Or maybe drawn to the mystery, he thought.
Ever since the bizarre death of his mother, Daniel had confided himself in his three new friends, and although he didn't know much about this strange girl, he supposed that she came part-and-parcel with them, and that he would have to accept her as one of them as well. The fact was, he wanted her around in any case. Christine, that is her name, he thought.
The rest of their gathering or "meeting" went like most other nights. They mostly did small talk, and discussed the normal things one could expect from teenagers, school, home, exams and that type of thing. Daniel was delighted when he caught Christine on a few occasion staring at him, she even gave him a pretty smile once, but then he quickly turned away, blushing.
They called it a night just after 4 am, and as a group they made their way down the dark building and into the cover of the brush in front of the building.
'Will we do this again tomorrow night?' Asked Cole.
Stephen looked at his watch, 'It's already tomorrow.'
'Yeah, whatever. So, are we meeting tomor- tonight or not?'
'I'm game.' said Christine before any of the others could. 'Will you be here, Daniel?' she asked.
Daniel shot a quick glance at Stephen and said, 'Sure, I am having a sleepover at Stephen's house anyhow.'
The five walked as a group to the west fence where they all climbed through except for Christine.
'I'm just going to have a last smoke before I leave, I'll see you all tomorrow. OK?'
They looked at each other, shrugged and made their way down the dark streets towards their sleeping homes. When Christine was sure that they were all out of sight, she turned around and head back to the dark convent.


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