Cindy worked hard. She was one of the best representatives at the electronics company. She felt she was treated unfairly until she received the unexpected.
Cindy was a Christian and attended church regularly. She went to bible study, Sunday school and sang on the church’s choir. Cindy was growing in her faith and decided to take one day at a time as the Lord continuously blessed her. Although she lived a typical life working to pay bills and to make ends meet. She could see and appreciate how far the Lord has brought her from not having much material wise, to having a few luxuries. . She lived in a small two-bedroom apartment that was nicely furnished and she drove a nice little Japanese car. Cindy desired more like most people but for the most part she was satisfied as she herself grow spiritually and financially. The Lord was her pilot through her faithfulness.
The company Cindy worked for always had some kind of incentive for their employees. They would get free lunches and bonuses for selling x amount of products etc. Cindy had only been employed at the company for three months. She sold for incentives like crazy. Each week when the managers came around to pass out the incentive checks, Cindy would never receive any. Cindy just sat quiet and thought that maybe the customers were canceling but then again it was too many. She couldn’t imagine everybody she got to buy the little extras had cancelled out on her. Just as she was going to inquire, the company put a stop to that particular incentive bonus. A week after they stopped, Cindy decided she needed to inquire. She asked her manager why had she never received any bonus checks when she had sold many extras. Her manager told her she would look into it and get back to her.
Another week went by when Cindy’s manager finally got back to her. “I’m sorry but they had your employee code all mixed up so that is why you never got paid for your incentives. However the problem has been corrected,” the manager said. “Oh great. Well don’t they owe me some incentive checks?” Cindy inquired. I’m not sure but let me check. Another week went by. “Cindy I’m sorry but since they’ve stop giving incentive checks for that program they will not pay you anything. I guess you just missed out,” the manager informed her not really acting sorry. It was more like “Oh well.”
If the situation had occurred three years ago with Cindy, she would have hit the roof and probably lost her job. When her manager confronted her with the answer, Cindy surprised herself by saying “okay.” As she took her seat at her desk, her spirit told her, “just continue to work and do as you’ve been doing. Do not get discouraged or discussed.” “Yeah okay but I can’t believe after all the extras I sold for this company and this is what I get, nothing,” Cindy talked back through her thoughts. The spirit did not answer. Cindy told several co-workers what had occurred. “If it were me they would have gave me my money!” “Huh, you good because I would have went off!” “You need to call the corporate office and find out some more. That just doesn’t make any sense!” Cindy thought about all she was told but her spirit would not let her avenge.
A year later, the company decided to have a major giveaway of prizes for one month. They would blindly select one name a day. The selected employee would stick their hand in a fish bowl to pull out a piece of paper with a prize written on it. They gave the employees a list of prizes previous to starting the contest.
Cindy awoke that morning feeling pretty weird. She could not figure out why but she knew it had something to do with her job. She was a little bothered by the feeling. Although she did nothing wrong as far as she knew, she didn’t know if she would get fired or what. Cindy’s shift started at ten o’clock in the morning. As she walked into the company that morning a co-worker informed her that they had selected her to pull for a prize. Cindy not wanting to take their word for anything went to her desk and sat down to begin her day. Cindy was at her desk for about twenty minutes before management called her to select her prize. “Good Luck!” co-workers yelled out to her as she went towards the manager’s office.
The manager handed Cindy the fish bowl of prizes. Cindy stuck her hand in and the first piece of paper she grabbed she pulled out without hesitation. The procedure was to give it to the manager and they would reveal the prize to the employee. Cindy passed over her piece of paper. The manager unfolded the paper and looked at Cindy. She looked back at the paper. “Wow,” she exclaimed. She passed the paper to Cindy. Cindy had won the grand prize of two thousand tax -free dollars, payable immediately. Cindy could not believe it. “You can get excited you know,” the manager said. Oh I am but I’m not the type to go berserk. Cindy walked back to her desk. The expression on her face let everyone know that she had gotten the grand prize. When she got to her desk she began to praise God and dance. “I know you didn’t get that money!” someone shouted. Yes I did! Thank you God!
Cindy knew all to well after a while that God made it so she could receive that blessing. The same bonus that had been given to many for selling extras was the same bonus that Cindy ended up winning. Cindy actually ended up with seven times over then what she actually sold. Now Cindy boosted to her co-workers. “It paid off for me to keep my mouth shut. My God told me to be still and I obeyed. Lunch anyone?”
This is a good story and deals well with how God wants us to behave in the office. However, there are several areas where the story could be improved through a grammar and spelling check. Also, as a story writer you want to show, not tell. This one relies in "telling" and not showing.
More dialogue goes a long in helping to show a story.
Hope this helps!