Jan and Ellen, thanks for your kind words.
Regarding why I numbered the stanzas. I wanted to use the same meter as "Jesus Christ, the Apple Tree" and the version of the lyrics that I found online, numbered the stanzas.
Another reason: I got increasingly confused regarding how to order the stanzas, so numbering them helped me keep track. In my rough draft, the poem was starting to wander a bit, and several of the stanzas rehashed the same thing--not saying anything new.
Ellen, I agree with you that it has an old world ring. "Jesus Christ, the Apple Tree" was written circa 1761, and I had it in my head the whole time I wrote my poem. Your comment about unusual syntax isn't strange. Old fashioned syntax isn't right for most poems.