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yarra wrote:Hi Jan,
I looked though my Challenge entries, mainly poetry, and found that I had hardly used any alliteration. Then I found this one in which I had used some alliteration.
http://www.faithwriters.com/wc-article- ... p?id=42537
I found the following alliterations:
Downcast eyes, dusty feet, an infant on her back...
simple life survival is the order of the day. ...
Walking for the water takes an hour at least, ...
Safety in their number, sisters of the war, ...
hungry bulging bellies, the menu rude. ...
Soft words she utters, in a plaintive prayer, ...
I really like alliteration, in moderation, in others' work so I was glad to find that I had used some. In this particular poem, 'Ayana's Day', I think it enhances the flow of the poem. I have used a lot more rhyme and rhythm than alliteration.
Now, here's a quick attempt at an alliterative poem about cars on a freeway. It's probably 'overkill' - too much alliteration. Anyway, here it is, just for the sake of having a go.
With the roar of the road, the squealing of tyres,
the freeway bears its beasts,
And the smoky smell of petroleum fuel
wafts on the languid wind.
People of purpose are driving their cars
to appointments far and near
In their four-wheeled way they rumble along
in cabin-cocooned comfort
oblivious to the odours
Thanks in advance for looking at these. Blessings, Elllen
yarra wrote:Thanks Lillian, and thanks Jan, for your comments.
I think you've already said it, Jan, but don't you think alliteration is easier to do in poetry than in prose? I guess it's just that poetry tends to rely on sounds more than prose does. (My opinion only.) But that said, I'll be looking out for alliteration in prose now.
I'm enjoying your lessons, Jan, when I have the time to browse the forums. Thanks!
Come forth wrote:I enjoyed this lesson and used alliteration in my last challenge entry; maybe I even used it a little too much. But I enjoyed deliberately looking for the opportunity -- particularly in the last line where I used it to indicate the strength of change in my MC.
If you have time and don't mind, take a look and give me some feedback. Particularly on where I may have overdone it.
here's the link: http://www.faithwriters.com/wc-article- ... p?id=47028
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