jaybird wrote:I'm revising my YA adult novel, and maybe it's ok the way it is--minus a few things to work on like the show n tell, and giving more feeling to the main character--but it was brought to my attention that the main character's (1st person) vocabulary is not that of a 10-year-old. Would his speech mature as he grows up in the story? I brainstormed this with Amy - had the idea to write it from the perspective of the character telling the story as a grown man. The latter seems to be the better choice. I'm thinking of a new hook - after some excitement the man tells a kid a story about his childhood.
I think it is a great idea to write it from the viewpoint as a grown man. An idea would be to skip the telling a kid a story and go straight into telling the story--as reminiscience, so it naturally would have a mix of the narrator's present, reliving his past. Perhaps this method would give you some alternative ways to express your ideas; some things might work better in the present, than in the past. The audience would be your readers.
Glad I found this fiction forum...my questions will probably be coming soon
. working on suspense now...don't see any questions regarding suspense yet, hope some of you have done/are working on simular items