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#13--The Well-Crafted Short Story

These lessons, by one of our most consistent FaithWriters' Challenge Champions, should not be missed. So we're making a permanent home for them here.

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Re: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story

Postby puregrace7 » Wed May 18, 2011 9:32 pm

(Envision a nervous giggle here)

Telling:
She was so disappointed in herself. She learned, by reading online, that she had written her entire challenge entry in ‘telling’ mode, which was completely unacceptable. Although she was quite alone, she blushed at the thought that she could be so ignorant.

Showing:

Her eyes bugged out at the computer screen and her heart sunk as she read the writing tips under the topic of The Well-Crafted Short Story. “What an ignoramus!” she chided as she knocked herself in the head with the palm of her hand. “I told the whole story instead of showing it. And I already submitted it. Phooey! I wonder if I could rewrite the story, correctly, and submit it under the next topic?”

(Another nervous giggle)

Do you think there’s any hope?

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Re: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story

Postby glorybee » Thu May 19, 2011 1:37 pm

No need to be nervous--we're all friends here.

Your two examples were great, and I'm sure that you're a quick study. You'll be just fine--glad to have you in this wondeful, faith-filled community of writers!

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Re: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story

Postby Francie » Sat Dec 19, 2015 5:43 pm

Hi Jan,
I really struggle with show vs tell. It's always been one of my biggest challenges. So I really appreciate this lesson. Here's my attempt at showing vs telling.

Tell: Susan worried about paying the bills. They had just been paid for the month and already the money was gone. She wondered if she should get a job, and considered searching the want ads.

Show: Susan stared at the pile of bills on the desk in front of her and breathed a sigh of frustration. "We just got paid… where did it all go? " she whimpered. Her eyes wandered to the newspaper laying next to the pile. In big, bold letters printed on the page she read: Wanted: Freelance Writer.

Thanks Jan!

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Re: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story

Postby glorybee » Sat Dec 19, 2015 6:17 pm

Well done, Francie!

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