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Hello,

Here is my elipsis homework.

1. Jeffrey needed to look good. Every detail of his dress, hygiene and hair style had to be perfect. It took him excessive amounts of time in preperation to exit his home. In every way, his appearance to others was excrutiatingly obsessed over.

Jeffrey needed to look good . . . In every way, his appearance to others was excrutiatingly obsessed over.

2. Even when she was a little girl, you could tell she was personable. She would kneel beside her bed and pray for long periods of time. God bless mommy, God bless daddy, God bless my teacher Mrs. Jackson . . .

3. I am so mad! Beth walked right by me at the supermarket and didn't give me the time of day. You know what the worse thing is? She thinks the sun rises and sets around her. If the shoe was on the other foot . . .

4. How about this?
I am trying to stay encouraged; to think of good things. That leads me to you. When you are present, I am in heaven, the sky is clear . . . I am filled with joy just thinking of you.

I have never used elipsis in my writing, although I do use it in my correspondance at work as if to express waiting on something or questionig something. Not sure if that is a correct way to use it?

5. The request has been submitted to the Network team . . .

Thanks!

Have a great day,
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You did find, Holly.

I have never used elipsis in my writing, although I do use it in my correspondance at work as if to express waiting on something or questionig something. Not sure if that is a correct way to use it?
Yes, it's perfectly correct. It's expressing "uncertainty." You're not sure where to go with a question ... or perhaps pondering. You might even be hoping the "sendee" will read between the lines and give you the answer you need.
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Thanks Ann!

Until the next lesson . . .

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I have a question about the following excerpt from one of my challenge entries. Like you, I use the ellipsis far too often. In just this one challenge entry I used them six (count them ... SIX!) times. I'll try to curb my appetite for them.

I know from your lesson that the usage in this example is correct, but . . .

My question is concerning the fact that I used no spaces at all.

Would you tell me what is the MOST acceptable form to use so any potential publisher would say "Finally, someone did it correctly!"

Here's the excerpt:

“You look like you could use a friend, Nelson.” The voice was soft. It would have been a good voice for a mother. “Would you like to talk?”

“I’m okay, Mrs. Evans. Thanks though. I was just thinking about...” He let his gaze lower away from Mrs. Evans’ kind eyes. “I was just thinking.”
I had something really memorable to write here but I forgot what it was.
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GShuler wrote:
Would you tell me what is the MOST acceptable form to use so any potential publisher would say "Finally, someone did it correctly!"
It is as I discovered. You must either use space dot dot dot space ( ... ) or space dot space dot space dot space ( . . . )

Check the link Steve provided HERE for excellent examples.

It clearly states dot dot dot (...) as incorrect.

I have changed my ellipses to . . . since last week. Humbly so.
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Ooooh...

I need to come back here and do some reading...SOON!

I know I use...way too much!

...Debbie :lol:
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