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GracefulWarrior wrote:Good Evening,
Here is my homework.
Tony walked into the house dripping from the rain. Halfway to the couch he realized he still had his muddy shoes on. His wife yelled at him angrily.
Tony entered his house, tossing his drippng umbrella in the corner, then headed for the couch. Suddenly, he heard a loud terrifying noise.
"Are you crazy," his wife shouted? "I spent all day cleaning that floor!"
"Oh, sorry dear," he replied, removing his muddy shoes.
But I'm not sure what you mean by 'starting with a clause'--and both of your sentences have action at the beginning.
If you were talking about starting with -ing verbs, I'm totally on board with you there. It's not stricty ungrammatical (although it can lead to problems--see below), but it's often overused by beginning writers.
I will be covering this in the Grammar Forum in the future.
And I really want to encourage you all to read / participate in the Grammar Forum.
I've been able to read entries in the last few months, more than I've ever been able to in my history at FW, and dare I say I am appalled at the lack of mastery of "basics," even among the Masters.
There. I said it.
Anja wrote: I am appalled at the lack of mastery of "basics," even among the Masters.
There. I said it.
honeyrock wrote:Here's my homework try:
Hilary was not only nervous but frightened as she waited to be summoned by the sheriff. She appreciated having been given the assignment to advance her news career, but how could she bring herself to look into the eyes of a serial killer?
Hillary swiped clammy palms on the side of her slacks one more time and shifted in her seat. A small shudder escaped her lips as she groped in her jacket for a pen with trembling fingers. What are you supposed to say to a serial killer?
Okay, this brought to mind a question, don't know if you have addressed it? The difference in writing between using "in spite of" or "despite"??
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