I'm so not good at this, hate editing my own work so fixing someone elses. Wow. Did it before when I taught esl overseas, but that's different. It's with non=english speaking people, trying to learn English. Anyway, I feel God wants me to practice and improve my writing so I'm gonna try this, if the kids give me a little time before they demand my attention.
HOMEWORK: Fix this. Feel free to do whatever it needs--add to it, develop it, be creative!
Jocelyn, a 14-year-old girl, was upset with her mother! "I can not believe that you will not let me go to see the movie called Spring Break Axe Murderer, with my best friends Ashley and Tiffani. All of the teenagers are going to the movie theater this evening."
Tina, a mother only in her early thirties because she had had Jocelyn when she was very young herself, was one of those mothers who tries to be a friend to her teenager. She thought for a while, and after seeing Jocelyn's great unhappiness, she decided to relent. "You may go to the movies with your young friends tonight. Be certain that you are cautious and careful, please." She is just like me, Tina thought to herself.
"Oh, Mom, you can't be serious. You mean, I can't go see 'Spring break Axe Murderer,' with Ashley and Tiffani. It's just a movie, Mooom. Come on."
"Jocelyn baby, a movie like that can't be good for you guys to watch."
"Mom, how can you even tell me it's bad for me when you haven't even seen the movie. You think you know what's best for me. You have no idea how important it is for me to go. Come on mom, can't you understand. Everyone has seen this movie. You want me to just sit home in my room and do nothing, while my friends go watch the movie and talk about it tomorrow. They'll ask me why I didn't go. And what am I supposed to say. My Dorky Mom, thought it was bad and wouldn't let me go.
"Joycelyn, watch how you talk to me."
"Ok, mom, but you don't care about me, so you can treat me however you like. It doesn't matter how much tonight meant to me, you just want me to treat you right. Ok, Mom. But....I'm really upset with you. You don't understand me."
Jocelyn, Look...I do understand, I had you when I was about your age. I don't want you to make the same mistakes I made."
"Mom, I'm not gay. These are my girls I want to hang out with. No boys mom. I won't get pregnant, Promise."
"Jocelyn, Please, watch how you talk to me."
Sigh. "Alright, you can go. But come straight home after the movie."
"Thanks, Mom, Thanks sooo much for understanding."
"Whatever, I don't know why your so much like me".