*sliding on my heels into class*
sorry I'm late, every time I get on this thread I get interrupted! But I read through the entire thing so I wouldn't miss any great tips.
I'm reading a book now by an author I'm not familiar with. Maybe I'm just getting highly critical of everything I read now, but this novel seems to have all the things I have been advised to steer away from. Could you look over this paragraph not only for salsa words, but for critique? And since I'm asking for critique, I won't list the name just yet.
The entire paragraph is 3/4 a page long, so this is just part of it:
"She started to pull into the long gravel driveway, but was stopped by a locked gate with a large No Trespassing sign wired
to it. Judith got out of her car to take a closer look. Suddenly a pair of wildly yapping dogs ran up. Normally, she loved dogs of all kinds, but these vicious
beasts appeared to be trained as guard dogs. And their snarling, barred teeth were enough to cause her to quickly back up. But she paused a moment, squinting
her eyes to see the house that was barely visible from the road."
What do you think?
And thank you so much Jan, for taking time to do this class!!!