From "Eyes of Elisha" by Brandilyn Collins:
in the far corner of the courtroom, as yet unnoticed by the crowd. She didn't know how she'd gotten there. She didn't know how she'd get out. She didn't know how to take her next breath.
Her mind lay shattered
, the puzzle pieces of Meg Jessler's murder having flown
into a million shards
in her brain, then back together in maniacal
rewind. But now the picture was different."
(In addition to the salsa words, I love the alliteration!
I try to delete as many adjectives & adverbs from my first draft as I can, replacing my "rice-cake" nouns and verbs with "salsa" words. When I try to do it as I write I get bogged down, so I'm getting into the habit of italicizing on the fly (ctrl+i in MS Word, just to confuse Verna and Ruth further.
) I probably use too many salsa words - the stories I spend the most time editing tend not to do as well in the challenge as some of my quickies. Could be the reason why?
And I love the thesaurus at dictionary.com!
Suggestion for a lesson:
Varying your sentence structure - I see a need for this in the beginner and advance levels.