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Jan"s Poetry Class--CLERIHEW

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Postby glorybee » Fri Oct 30, 2009 7:16 am

Yvonne, do you want to be the guest teacher next week?

Seriously.
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Postby yvonne » Fri Oct 30, 2009 7:22 am

Ha ha ha...

I kind of spoke too loudly, didn't I? :heehee

Hmmmm... let me think about it. (
(I'll let you know today sometime.)

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Postby glorybee » Fri Oct 30, 2009 7:33 am

We could always co-teach it. You could send me what you'd like to say, and I could add my nickel's worth.
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Postby violin4jesus » Fri Oct 30, 2009 8:26 am

Can you do more than one person? :roll:

Seriously, this is the only thing that came to mind: :lol:

Angelina and Brad Pitt
Must really think they are it
To say it's okay to forgo marriage
With twenty kids in their baby carriage

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Little Bo Peep

Postby OldManRivers » Fri Oct 30, 2009 9:09 am

ah, an ode to Little Bo Peep,
who counted sheep - one, two- when she couldn't sleep,
but then she dozed - snore, snore - too long one morn,
and woke to find her flock was -snip, snip- shorn.

the original was

ah, an ode to Little Bo Peep,
who counted sheep when she couldn't sleep,
but then she dozed too long one morn,
and woke to find her flock was shorn.

but I then thought it too metered.
May God's gentle grace be with you.

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Postby glorybee » Fri Oct 30, 2009 8:17 pm

violin4jesus wrote:Can you do more than one person? :roll:

Seriously, this is the only thing that came to mind: :lol:

Angelina and Brad Pitt
Must really think they are it
To say it's okay to forgo marriage
With twenty kids in their baby carriage


This is super, Leah!
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Re: Little Bo Peep

Postby glorybee » Fri Oct 30, 2009 8:18 pm

OldManRivers wrote:ah, an ode to Little Bo Peep,
who counted sheep - one, two- when she couldn't sleep,
but then she dozed - snore, snore - too long one morn,
and woke to find her flock was -snip, snip- shorn.

the original was

ah, an ode to Little Bo Peep,
who counted sheep when she couldn't sleep,
but then she dozed too long one morn,
and woke to find her flock was shorn.

but I then thought it too metered.


Good job, Jim. It's hard to write "good bad" poetry, isn't it?
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Re: Jan"s Master Class--CLERIHEW

Postby beff » Fri Oct 30, 2009 9:27 pm

glorybee wrote:6. While lines 1 and 2 may be roughly equal in length, lines 3 and 4 may be quite long or quite short, with no regular meter.


I took this at "face value"... did I overdo the "quite long" rule?
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Postby glorybee » Fri Oct 30, 2009 9:33 pm

beff wrote:I may be drummed out of FW for this... or at the least asked to sit in the corner of your Master Classroom.

Lizzie Andrew Bordon
Evaded tax evasion.
Originally she planned to buffet her parents with the ax.
But due to financial difficulties, she switched to whacks when she heard the government was threatening citizens with a restaurant and buffet tax.

:sofa

I tried to make the last line stay on one line, but it didn't cooperate. :(


LOL Beth! I don't know how this one slipped by me earlier. I've been in and out for the last three days--that's my excuse, and I'm sticking to it.

This made me LITERALLY laugh out loud.

Oh no, I don't think you took it too literally, not at all. This is perfect!
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Postby beff » Fri Oct 30, 2009 9:38 pm

oh good.... was hoping I wasn't taking advantage of Rule #6 :)
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Postby Allison » Fri Oct 30, 2009 11:23 pm

Okay, I suppose three about myself was a bit much... :oops: :oops:

So here's one about someone famous.

Ken Mattingly
Took the news begrudgingly
Kicked off the Apollo 13 crew,
But big red measles he never grew.
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Isaiah 40:30-31 (NIV)

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Postby glorybee » Sat Oct 31, 2009 8:32 am

Perfect, Allison! It pokes fun at him, but not in a satirical or hurtful way. Cute clerihew.
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Postby Verna » Sat Oct 31, 2009 12:29 pm

Emily Elizabeth Dickinson
Wrote scads of rhymes and then some,
Could have been well known as an author but lived solitary life instead,
Then one day her poems were famous--too bad she was dead.

Whew, Jan, this was tough--trying to do math without numbers!
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Proverb 17:22

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Postby glorybee » Sat Oct 31, 2009 12:33 pm

Oh, but Verna, you did a great job! And you used one of my favorite poets, too.

You'll find next week easier.
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clerihew-first attempt

Postby lidijo1 » Mon Nov 23, 2009 11:24 am

I wrote my first one about my hubby who thinks he should be famous, and combined him with some one who really is famous (sort of)


Rocky Lynn Johnson
His image of self is a big one
Fancies himself a wrestler... when in the mirror he's looking
Especially when he says the line "do you smell what the Rock is cooking?"

Lisa J.
I don't know what my future holds... but I know WHO holds my future...and "I'm persuaded that HE is able to keep that which I've committed unto HIM against that day".

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