I have had a few people contact me, looking for a buddy. If you want to send me a PM, I can either hook you up with some of those people. I also know some people who have a nice critique group going that you might want to check out.
Here are some links that might help you find someone too. viewtopic.php?f=90&t=33909
You may want to post it on the board or PM some of the people who have responded recently.
There is one I'm involved in, but a lot of the people have not been writing very much so it may not get you as much feedback as some of the other groups. Let me know though, and I'll try to connect you with it, if you're interested.
You may want to look into this thread. It has some great writing tips in it. Jan's Writing Basics
Amy Wiley has written a great little booklet to help people with the show don't tell concept. It's quite reasonable. I think it's $3 for the ebook and around $9 for a paperback (including shipping) here is the link to that: http://www.sparrowsflight.net/Amys-books.htm
I hope this helps some. Let me know if you need any more help.