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by Cinnamon Bear
Sat Aug 23, 2014 8:12 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--TINY POEMS
Replies: 17
Views: 10118

Re: Be a Better Writer--TINY POEMS

I thought haiku was easy until I remembered the 5-7-5 rule. Here are my attempts: Inspiration: Peter, my silver tiger: Stroke hair nibble ear Uphold ownership of hand Occupy warm lap Inspiration: Violet, my calico Angora: In search of heated pulsing fur-covered chin rest Procure Angora Inspiration: ...
by Cinnamon Bear
Fri Aug 22, 2014 7:16 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--ADJECTIVES in the proper order
Replies: 14
Views: 10433

Re: Be a Better Writer--SOME THINGS ABOUT ADJECTIVES

Yes, this assignment is hard. :? Here's my attempt. Below each sentence, I listed the royal order and gave my reasons for using or not using commas. 1) She has beautiful, large green eyes. Royal Order: Observation Size Color Comma Reasons: “And” could be used to separate “beautiful” and “large.” The...
by Cinnamon Bear
Sun Aug 03, 2014 7:32 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--THE FINAL JUDGING CRITERION
Replies: 8
Views: 7517

Re: Be a Better Writer--THE FINAL JUDGING CRITERION

It's about time I start posting on this thread, considering that I was the one who requested it. (Thanks Jan!) :D I used to be very sensitive about this issue, until I finally got into Masters. "People just don't understand my writing!" I moaned. :violin Now, I realize that my lack of E.C.s wasn't b...
by Cinnamon Bear
Fri Jul 25, 2014 1:14 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--TELL, DON'T SHOW? WHAT?
Replies: 42
Views: 24389

Re: Be a Better Writer--TELL, DON'T SHOW? WHAT?

...I've come across many stories where the person simply tells or shows too much. An example might be like this: He left his apartment to head for work. He closed the door behind him and walked to the car. He put his key in the lock and turned it. He looked down to see that his tire had gone flat. ...
by Cinnamon Bear
Fri Jul 25, 2014 11:41 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--TELL, DON'T SHOW? WHAT?
Replies: 42
Views: 24389

Re: Be a Better Writer--TELL, DON'T SHOW? WHAT?

Hi! I'm just lurking--er looking--with great interest. :D

Cinnamon Bear
by Cinnamon Bear
Mon Jul 07, 2014 9:44 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY
Replies: 47
Views: 35236

Re: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY

swfdoc1 wrote:Jan is wonderful.
She is, indeed! :D

Cinnamon Bear
by Cinnamon Bear
Mon Jul 07, 2014 9:17 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY
Replies: 47
Views: 35236

Re: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY

I know Jan generally prefers to stay away from using most technical grammar terms, but since you used one, I think it is important to note that the heart of your confusion may be that you have mis-identified dependent clauses. Neither of these sentences has a dependent clause. Remember, a dependent...
by Cinnamon Bear
Sat Jul 05, 2014 10:04 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY
Replies: 47
Views: 35236

Re: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY

Jan, thanks for your reply. Jan and Shann, thanks for continuing to discuss this complicated topic. But when you add the verb, the second part of the sentence becomes independent (with an implied "she'). I am still having difficulty with the placement of a comma after the independent clause but befo...
by Cinnamon Bear
Sat Jul 05, 2014 5:59 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--ASK ME ANYTHING
Replies: 33
Views: 14920

Re: Be a Better Writer--ASK ME ANYTHING

Milly Born wrote:Also thanks to my buddy Virginia Bliss, who made me aware of my comma problem.
Milly, you can view my comma problems at the comma thread:

http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpB ... 77#p530777


Cinnamon Bear :)
by Cinnamon Bear
Sat Jul 05, 2014 5:53 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY
Replies: 47
Views: 35236

Re: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY

Thanks, Jan. I am confused about the placement of commas in reference to strong (independent) and weak (dependent) clauses. I was under the impression that if a weak clause follows a strong clause, a comma is not needed to separate them. For example (also from my manuscript): 1) Agnes gazed at her, ...
by Cinnamon Bear
Sat Jul 05, 2014 4:26 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY
Replies: 47
Views: 35236

Re: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY

Jan, I hope it is okay for me to use two examples from my manuscript that you corrected. I hope that my question regarding commas will be of general interest. Regarding the rule for using a comma before “who”, I am under the impression that a comma should only be used if the clause beginning with “w...
by Cinnamon Bear
Sat Jun 28, 2014 7:22 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY
Replies: 47
Views: 35236

Re: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY

:sofa

I put the comma in the correct place for those seven sentences. Too bad I can't get it right all the time. Now let me see, do I put a comma after "bad"..........? :oops:

Cinnamon Bear
by Cinnamon Bear
Sat Jun 14, 2014 6:39 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--MASTERING METER
Replies: 65
Views: 44280

Re: Be a Better Writer--MASTERING METER

I'll have to give this more thought, but I'll bet that the really accomplished poets choose a specific meter to reflect specific moods. I'd love to hear from someone who has done that (oh, Kenn Allan, where are you?), and to know what their process is for selecting the right meter for the poem. Is ...
by Cinnamon Bear
Sat Jun 14, 2014 3:43 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--MASTERING METER
Replies: 65
Views: 44280

Re: Be a Better Writer--MASTERING METER

For part 2 of the assignment, I chose “Jesus Christ, the Apple Tree” which was written by an unknown author, sometime around 1761. The meter is 8, 8, 8, 8; with the exception of the 4th stanza which is 9, 9, 8, 8. The pattern of stressed syllables is 2, 4, 6, 8 in both the eight-syllable lines and t...

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