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by Francie
Wed Dec 23, 2015 12:07 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: #15--WELL-CONSTRUCTED NON-FICTION
Replies: 46
Views: 34242

Re: #15--WELL-CONSTRUCTED NON-FICTION

Thank you so much Jan. These exercises are helping me so much. This is the most enjoyable class I've ever attended. The Lord has truly gifted you as a teacher and a writer.
God Bless,
Francie
by Francie
Mon Dec 21, 2015 4:02 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: #15--WELL-CONSTRUCTED NON-FICTION
Replies: 46
Views: 34242

Re: #15--WELL-CONSTRUCTED NON-FICTION

Hi Jan, I hope this Christmas season is a joyous one for you and yours. I also hope that you don't mind that I am submitting my homework at a time when many people are on vacation. Please don't feel I'm expecting your response right away. No, I know you must be very busy and quite deserving of some ...
by Francie
Sat Dec 19, 2015 5:43 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story
Replies: 58
Views: 49950

Re: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story

Hi Jan, I really struggle with show vs tell. It's always been one of my biggest challenges. So I really appreciate this lesson. Here's my attempt at showing vs telling. Tell: Susan worried about paying the bills. They had just been paid for the month and already the money was gone. She wondered if s...
by Francie
Mon Nov 30, 2015 11:28 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
Replies: 104
Views: 80605

Re: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion

Thanks Jan,
I appreciate your input. All your ideas have me thinking. This is such great exercise. I'd like to work on this one some more until I can improve it, and send it back by you? if you don't mind.
God Bless
Francie
by Francie
Mon Nov 30, 2015 12:53 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
Replies: 104
Views: 80605

Re: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion

Hi Jan, Here's the link to my article. After attempting to revise the beginning and ending, I still sense a fizzle at both ends. I didn't change the beginning much, but hoped I improved it at least a little. I appreciate any and all comments and suggestions you have. http://www.faithwriters.com/wc-a...
by Francie
Sat Nov 28, 2015 4:56 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
Replies: 104
Views: 80605

Re: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion

Hi Jan, Here is the new beginning of a challenge entry I submitted for the topic STIR. My previous beginning rated pretty low on the Judge Report, so I revised it, but I'm not sure if I made it much better. Here's my revision. Please let me know your opinion. Thank you for your help. Ridley pulled t...
by Francie
Sat Nov 28, 2015 4:46 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Conclusion #2--the 5th judging criterion
Replies: 40
Views: 22242

Re: Conclusion #2--the 5th judging criterion

Hi Jan, I just received my Judge Report back from my last challenge entry on the topic STIR. It was a comical piece. My conclusion rated the lowest on the report. So here I am with a revision. I tried to leave it open ended but I'm afraid it sounds too much like 'they lived happily ever after' sort ...
by Francie
Fri Jul 17, 2015 9:12 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
Replies: 102
Views: 58612

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING

Thank you Jan for your wonderful teaching and support. I am learning so much!
God Bless,
Francie
by Francie
Thu Jul 16, 2015 10:48 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
Replies: 102
Views: 58612

Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING

Hi Jan, This is so much fun. Here's my attempt at Tight Writing. Thanks for your response. Doreen wouldn't let the clacking subway, or the man sitting next to her, distract her from her book. She inched closer and leaned her shoulder against the window. When the train sped through the second of five...
by Francie
Thu Jul 16, 2015 8:55 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--FIND YOUR OWN VOICE
Replies: 13
Views: 6985

Re: Be a Better Writer--FIND YOUR OWN VOICE

This style of writing to me is like a dream come true. Proper punctuation has always been one of my greatest challenges in anything I write. So, no commas? Sounds fine to me. And lets add semi-colons to the list as well. I also like how the author intermingles dialogue without setting it apart with ...
by Francie
Thu Jul 09, 2015 2:03 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--TELL, DON'T SHOW? WHAT?
Replies: 42
Views: 19873

Re: Be a Better Writer--TELL, DON'T SHOW? WHAT?

Hi Jan, I love how good showing puts me in the moment. It takes a skillful writer to describe the actions and scene in such a way to allow the reader to see and feel as if they're actually there. Even so, I must say, a good telling is like a dear friend who comes close, throws their arm around my sh...
by Francie
Sat May 16, 2015 8:43 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--Devotionals
Replies: 84
Views: 56911

Re: Be a Better Writer--Devotionals

Thank you so much Jan. Your feedback is such an encouragement. I woke up today with a new quest in my heart to revisit my early devotionals and see where I need to revise and nurture them. I plan to be a regular in your classroom.
Love and Blessings,
Francie
by Francie
Thu May 14, 2015 11:30 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--Devotionals
Replies: 84
Views: 56911

Re: Be a Better Writer--Devotionals

Hi Jan, All of your instructions and information on writing devotionals has rekindled my enthusiasm. I write mostly non-fiction with a tendency to be on the dry side at times. The following is a devotional I wrote a few years back. I know it's a bit quirky and so I'll be holding my breath when I hit...
by Francie
Thu May 07, 2015 1:33 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--PACING
Replies: 23
Views: 10687

Re: Be a Better Writer--PACING

Hi Jan, I thought I'd try to jump in and try your lesson from March on pacing. I chose the first one with the fast pace and tried to slow it down using mostly internal thought which didn't seem to transfer showing the italics? Hope this works and that my changes didn't take away from the original pi...
by Francie
Mon May 04, 2015 11:33 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--PLAYING AROUND WITH MOOD
Replies: 12
Views: 6428

Re: Be a Better Writer--PLAYING AROUND WITH MOOD

Hi Jan, This is really a lot of fun. It took me longer than I expected, but finally, here's my attempt at playing around with mood. Thanks! So sweet she seemed at first, but her pasted-on smile no longer hid her true intentions. With ugly ambition she grasped any opportunity to make him appear a foo...

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