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by Kiwi kid
Fri Jun 15, 2012 3:57 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Beginnings #2--the 4th judging criterion
Replies: 52
Views: 43949

Re: #17--A GREAT BEGINNING #2

Hi Jan, Sorry, I know I often confuse people :oops: . I did sort of mean that I had put a version of that phrase "It was a difficult decision" each time Batt made the decision. Not exactly the same wording each time but in there somewhere, 4 times in total including the last time when it is changed....
by Kiwi kid
Thu Jun 14, 2012 6:41 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Beginnings #2--the 4th judging criterion
Replies: 52
Views: 43949

Re: #17--A GREAT BEGINNING #2

Thank you so much Jan, That was really helpful!I'm the opposite of you and usually burble on for pages :D so it is really good to have help to see what can be cut. To my inexperienced eyes, I think the brick wall is important, but on reading the whole story you might not think it matters at all. Whe...
by Kiwi kid
Wed Jun 13, 2012 5:01 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Beginnings #2--the 4th judging criterion
Replies: 52
Views: 43949

Re: #17--A GREAT BEGINNING #2

This is from my new short story. I'm not entirely happy with it yet, and it hasn't been proof read, but I like the beginning because I think it sets the scene well. 'Batt stared blankly at the brick wall out the window and made the decision to go for it. It was a difficult decision to make, and she ...

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